Steam

I like the way steam flies up from my tea.

It twists and twirls like it's in a ballet,

Graceful yet hot to the touch.

Other times it looks like warriors,

Fighting their heroic battles on horseback.

It's almost as if I'm seeing into another world.

To capture such a thing is foolish, I know.

Most people would claim that it's 'just steam',

Nothing more than wisps of hot air.

But it's much more fun to think otherwise, no?

Reviews

[Sectando]

I like the abstract imagery and comparison to where you imagination is taking you. My only critique is that I personally would take out the "no" at the end. If it's for rhyme, I don't feel like it works. I feel like it would have a much stronger and defining ending without it, but that's just MY opinion. Good penning :)