Hello Death It's Me Again

*This is not an actual suicide note*

Dear Death,

I have heard many horrible things about you. Many people suffered from your visits and have cursed your coming. Does this sadden you knowing you're never greeted with happiness or love? you are surely the victim in all of this commotion. Even the most hated being must of felt happiness in their life. Sadly I find it hard if you ever had any pleasure in yours. You must have a lonely existence. You are not alone for I have a lonely existence filled with sorrow as well. You are the only one that understands me, you are my only friend. You won't have to come to me for a visit for I will come to you today. We will then have each other and our loneliness will be done for so be ready for me my friend. The darkness in life will be cleansed by blissful death and life's ridicule of you my dear friend will end.

Sincerely,

Fabian Franco

Author's Note

A bit different from what I been doing but oh well. Constuctive criticism please.

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

I love the concept of addressing a personal note to death. It personifies it, and that allows you to write to it as if it were a person, which allows readers to think of it as a person - so it invites a different perspective than people normally have of death. In writing this, it's interesting to see you sympathize with something that people are so scared of and normally hate talking about! But of course, death isn't a person and doesn't have feelings, so maybe what you really accomplished was an interesting experiment in projection. Anyways, it was deep and I enjoyed it, and I think there is even room for expanding on it some, if it's not too morbid for you as it is :p

There was a weird mistake in one of the sentences though, just to point it out:

"Sadly I find it hard if you ever had any pleasure in yours." I think maybe you left some words out there.

But yeah , nice job here :)

[Blue Belle]

I like it. It's different in a good way. I like how you used personification. Great job. Take Care! Stay Strong! :)

[Kiari Sabon]

i like it its a nice write

[Lexi]

Amazing!

[Kenneth The Poet]

I'm ready for it some days. Nice work.

[Sukriti Suki]

I like this...something about it...maybe that you feel for death, which is new for one. Also the very casual approach demands attention. I didn't really like the first line ' i have heard many horrible things about you'.....maybe the start needs to be a bit more punchy....But otherwise I really like this. It is not a poem though.