Invading My Fears

Just some thoughts of how everybody lives so easily in this crazy world of ours.

"Invading My Fears" by Fabian Franco

Pierce the diamond with silence and grace

Keeping my distance from these paper walls

The mind can be a horrifying thing

Forever broken by the ahedonistic

The pain behind my eyes is unbarable

The tilting of emotions can't be understood

Fear crawling under the skin

Invading the heart with ease

Our sight will always stay plain

Never seeing the insanity within each of us

Author's Note

I had writers block for about the past week. Tell me how I did and I always welcome constructive criticism.

Reviews

[Lexi]

This is beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. There's nothing else I can say.

[Cassiopia Summers]

I agree with Sage. There's a certain emptiness that you feel within the lines and letters that just pulls you into the poem. It's a decent write. :)

[No use.]

i like the half-empty feel to this one~ scrolling down Coral suggested lengthening this poem to convey what you are trying to express... not opposing that suggestion, but like i said, personally, i like the half-empty feel, a lot, actually.

[aloha.]

i can relate to this. which made it super easy to read.
i disagree with the girl below. i don't think the poem just dropped off. i like the end. sure, it makes me feel like there should be more.. but i like that about it. i get to imagine what would have come next and it just adds emotion/dramatic effect in a way.

[Miss Coral]

I don't know if this piece fully conveys what you wanted to- I would think of lengthening it. Otherwise, I think this was excellent. You have a great use of language, and I especially liked the phrasing in this one. Great write.

-Coral-

[loowzerX]

Oh my! I love this. so powerful and effective. + very well written!

[Ruth]

We only see what we wish to it would seem!
This is a powerful poem love :)
A great walk through life's ebba nd flow of feelings and blinkers! lol
Awesome
xx

[Aven]

I love the simple but profound likeness in "fear crawling under my skin". Keep writing, it is the best way to beat a writer's block - with contempt. Keep it coming!

[Vanna Renee]

I fear this poem drops off...
Add more of a meaning and ending to it, a smoother ending would be very much appreciated,
But overall, I understand where you're coming from.
It is true that fear does invade our hearts.
You're poem is of great truth.
Well done.