Eyeing.

Eyeing.

A Poem by Fay Slimm

 

 

Eyeing.

 

A fish,
like translucent shadow 
slowly shows silver through dimly

low-lit submarine green.

 

A gill
like laced edge of poncho,    
rising to roll a lake's morning face

steadily sways to breathe.

 

A skin,
of thinnest divide knows
it is separated from my airy flesh

solely by liquid need.

 

A fin,
touched by finger coated        
in bubbles for closer contact slips

to more safety beneath.

 

A flip,
and fish dives fast below  
in mist churned by interference

'tho glassily eyeing me.

© 2020 Fay Slimm


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Very Zen for me this. And much appreciated for it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fay Slimm

4 Years Ago

And grateful dear Ken for your dropping by and for the review of Eyeing...........


we got a choice to make now.. dont we.. is this a single specimen poem or a whole shoal ... after peering through so many reeds, I'm blowed if I can make up my mind .. but at the end of the day, it really doesn't matter which way ya look at them/it .. there are no red herrings here :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fay Slimm

4 Years Ago

Only a one-off sorry dear friend - contact with that fish left its mark on my memory and will proba.. read more
Neville

4 Years Ago


then it is a fine specimen and true.. I'm all for catch n release these days... x
Its like i'm there. But always on the other side of the glass

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fay Slimm

4 Years Ago

On the other side of the glass is the best place to be for us with human lungs Cory - thank you loa.. read more
Thanks to Einstein Noodle (Gene) for read requesting me on your excellent poem that I would've hated to miss. I love this poem on many levels. First, it's just plain excellent detailed observation of real life & then transcribed into interesting word paintings. Second, I'm reminded of how this could be something other than the fish, something other than the water, like possibly the veil that separates the living from the dead. But most of all, I'm just thinking this could be the way life itself seems so elusive & so ever-changing depending on the angle & the light at which we view it. This is brilliant on many levels! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fay Slimm

4 Years Ago

You doubly honour my work dear Margie -- so so pleased you saw in my few words other depths of meani.. read more
Very nice use of description. You allowed the reader to see your words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fay Slimm

4 Years Ago

My pleasure always is to share intimate meetings with nature and its wonders dear friend.
Gorgeous imagery in this beautiful poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fay Slimm

4 Years Ago

So so pleased you enjoyed the read of a meetings with a little fish Ana - - the more we poets look t.. read more
dearest Fay... years ago, we fished on the side of a mountain
where Rainbow Trout were easily caught. I had a large Net with
a handle and when we caught the Trout and placed it in the Net...
it swished and struggled and slowly lost its Colour.
It was put on Ice for the drive home. I will never forget the
Exquisite Beauty of the Rainbow Trout, and how I felt so badly
to disturb the gift of Nature. gently, Pat

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fay Slimm

4 Years Ago

I understand completely Pat - we too feel the pull to take up the saying - Live and Let Live that ha.. read more
oh my goodness Fay! i think this is exquisite .. if ever the sense of haiku could be expanded and translated to human touch this is it .. i loved reading and experiencing every drop of "Eyeing" .. the pic a perfect compliment and vis versa ... which came first? the pic or the poem? just curious ;) V3 is killer for me .. stunning imagery throughout .. drew me in and held me there .. felt a bit of the splash of water as the fish turns and flips that tail ... well done! thanks so much for sharing .. i can't believe more people have not found this one yet ..

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

oh my goodness .. a dolphin!! magical no doubt! :) blessing galore on ya friend!
barleygirl

4 Years Ago

Thanks for read-requesting me on this poem, Gene, becuz it's not to be missed! *smile*
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

i agree :)

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Fay Slimm
Fay Slimm

Camborne, Cornwall, United Kingdom



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