Tears for Him!

A girl who wishes well for her ex-lover even after their breakup

With no one to confess, with no one to lean,

I fight the battle of tears that no one can see.

I bat my eyelids so that the tears don’t fall,

I wish I have enough strength to face this all.

Alas! My pillow gets damp to the core,

All I can do is flip it and weep more.

My heart trembles for want of strength,

All that I get is the pain of great length.

When I finally gave up feeling stoic,

Thus comes another one to stir me back.

When I wish well for him in spite of pain,

All he does is come back hurting himself again.

Day after day, my heart loses sense,

I still want him to be happy, so intense.

When I cry because of him, I cry,

When I cry for him, I die.

I wish we lived happily together once,

Now, all I wish we live happily at least.

With no one to confess, with no one to lean,

I fight the battle of tears that no one can see.

Reviews

[Priyadarshi]

The battle of tears is usually unseen,
ghost of pain is fought in lights dim,
In darkness, where you stand alone,
where there is only one comforting tone,
your best friend who always lives with you,
who lies and cries and dies when you do,
but seldom have you noticed her presence,
seldom have you noticed her humor sense,
seldom have you noticed she has stood by you,
seldom have you noticed she has lived like you,
You may ask, where is she, where is she?
If she's my best friend, why can't her I see?
And I would say, my dearest friend of pen,
close your hopeful eyes and count to ten,
then go to your room where your tears bend,
and peep into the mirror to find your friend,
smile at her, and she would smile back at you,
notice her eyes and she will notice as you do,
and look at her how brave she has been,
to fight all you fought, but was unseen,
She has been all what a friend can be,
She has been all what a friend must be.

I know tears of a life time
would not heal by a small smile,
but that doesn't mean at all,
that you should not give it a try?
Amigo, If you have your self,
you have all that you need,
you will fight the world till last,
you will make the pain to bleed.

[wordman]

such a sad write, hurting people all over the world

[Fathima Fara]

It was meant to be sad and to empathize with the girl in the poem! :) Thanks for the review wordman! :)

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[barleygirl]

Your poem describes a very sad person -- you show us this, instead of telling (first rule of good writing) by describing the tears & unusual descriptions like turning the pillow to cry more, etc. I think the crying in the first stanza goes on & on for too much time. I wish we could see more details about what made such sadness -- more information to understand why she's so shattered. You've done a good job of showing us how she wishes the guy well, even tho this future happiness does not include her. I think this scenario happens often, where people are crying their hearts out where nobody can know how sad they are, so this is a universal message of broken love.

[Fathima Fara]

Thanks barleygirl! Actually the reason for her crying is that she broke up and the guy is not happy even after that! I I wanted to include that, but couldn't put properly in words!

[barleygirl]

I know what you mean . . . happens to me all the time. I have one idea of what I'm going to put into a poem, but then while writing, it takes on a life of its own.

[Happy hours]

it's really sad to see or imagine anyone in pain....
wonderful write! thanks for sharing

[Bailey1204]

Wonderfully written! So well said... it left me with goose bumps. I love how you started and ended with the same phrase, just like a good song in band!

[Fathima Fara]

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[Bailey1204]

I will definitely look at that tomorrow as I am about to go to sleep. Good luck with your writing and don't let anyone tell you that you are bad because your writing is some of the best I've heard... And I am the type of person who usually doesn't like poetry much. Keep being inspired, Abby (my real name)

[Bailey1204]

I will definitely look at that tomorrow as I am about to go to sleep. Good luck with your writing and don't let anyone tell you that you are bad because your writing is some of the best I've heard... And I am the type of person who usually doesn't like poetry much. Keep being inspired, Abby (my real name)

[Bailey1204]

Sorry, my stupid phone posted twice!Grr!

[Fathima Fara]

Ha ha... Thanks Abby :)

[Bailey1204]

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[Bailey1204]

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