Killer Smile

A man questions a strange little girl about her name.

Oh little one with Scarlet Dreams

Whose mind is clouded so

Your apron stained with Violet tears,

the pain, it overflows..

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Sapphire pools of rippling hate

Brown curly locks of dread

Dark skin to match your tainted soul,

Whose innocence has fled..

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"Your name." I ask "Is all I want."

"One answer will suffice."

Instead you give a wicked smile,

One coated thick with ice.

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Oh little one with Scarlet Dreams

Whose mind is clouded so

Your apron stained with Pastel tears,

the pain, you'd ne'er show..

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Those eyes, once filled with joy and life

Hold no remorse or love

a hellish void now rests in place,

a Crimson past of blood.

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"If I oblige, and so I shall

What then will you persist?

a troubled past, a shackled mind

All shrouded in the mists?"

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Oh little one with Scarlet dreams

Whose mind is clouded so

Your apron stained with Crimson tears,

No one will ever know.

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"Your name," I say. "Again I ask

Is all that I pursue.

No trickery or foul deeds here"

At least give me a clue?"

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She smiled that look of wretched mock

But then with a small voice

She raised her head in soft reply,

and said "It's your own choice."

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"What a strange, peculiar girl." I said

"To speak such horrid thoughts..

What harm could come from knowing a name

What madness has it wrought?"

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At last between two lips of red

A single word took form

It broke my heart into pieces and shards

And left me feeling forlorn.

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

Your savory choice of style and words is breathtaking and beautiful. It holds a magnetic charm that draws me in and again transports me into a realm of genius.

[Verslayer]

Your rhythm and rhyme is impeccable...such a poem of mystery and intrigue you have penned...it's not often I have pleasure to read such poetry and I'm so glad I stumbled onto this one of yours!

[E.V. Black]

Oh very creepy. And very stalker-ish as well. What little girl would want a creepy, older man to know her name? The fact that he keeps persisting on getting her name makes it all that more interesting. I do think that in some places the rhyming pattern is off, but the quality of the poem shines through those mistakes. Really, I admire this. You have such talent! Excellent piece.

[FineFrenzy]

Your work is inspiring. In my humble opinion, this is your most amazing creation and I only pray you would write more and more.

[JCP]

I like it. Makes me wonder why the name is so elusively secret. Nice scheme and meter as well. Didn't read sing songy at all. Nice work!

[Adriel]

I love the use of consonance in lines
"Instead you give a wicked smile,
One coated thick with ice"
"She smiled that look of wretched mock
But then with a small voice"

You string the words together so beautifully and naturally.

[B the Daydreamer]

Beautiful!
-B-

[SR Urie]

E,
Superb imagery and rhythm, and such a sad yet remarkable little girl. BZ

[S.J. Wist]

"Oh little one with Scarlet dreams
Whose mind is clouded so
Your apron stained with Crimson tears,
No one will ever know."

--fave stanza. I loved the rhythm. Tap me on the back if you post up more poetry ^ ^ I like your work.