Keep It Together

 

Being the glue that keeps this small society together is not easy.

When dependency is towered on your back,

and you haven't enough energy to hold yourself up,

You hesitate to question for a helping hand,

But if you don't ask, it will never pass by.

Shooting stars are everywhere,

I can't seem to gather enough sense to catch one for myself,

They're too fast for my liking.

 

Author's Note

Be cruel.

Reviews

[Alyssa Dufresne]

ABSOLUTELY HORRIBLE. I'm just kidding. Seriously, I am. I'm this mean to everybody.

In reality, this is an awesome poem. It captures all of the strain on the daily worker (the first line sounds like a single mom almost), but the imagery is what caught my eye the most. The last three lines left me with the image of a meteor shower. For some reason I keep thinking of someone relaxing on the ground watching it, either from surrendering to exhaustion or just being completely incapable of moving.

Great work.

[Katrina Cora (K-C)]

Okay, all in all, It's a beautiful poem...but one thing you might want to change. See, the sentence 'I can't seem to catch one for myself, they're to fast for my liking' is a little off course. So, your talking about you are either to proud, or to lazy to catch a shooting star. Now, I've only been a member on this site for, oh, 5 minutes, but I think maybe the sentance should go something like this: "I can't seem to gather the courage to catch one for myself, I find I'm to proud to do it in front of someone, because if I did, they would know, I want a wish granted." So, maybe something like that. Heehee, you might not want to take advice from a nine-year-old, though. :)

[Call Me Cash]

I have to agree with Midnight Writer, it hints on single mom. I like the visuals that your poem provokes. Its thoughtful and moving, without trying to hard, which is key.
I like the tone that you set and how you make it seem so effortless.

It's very good!
Well done!

[Anya]

I love this poem! It will be going onto my reading list.
The last 3 lines are my favorite, it finishes the poem nicely, in my opinion. :)