Scared child (Lyrics)

Well, It's just a message to all those parents, who have been influencing their children's lives with their fighting stuff. They don't realize how much it can hurt a child. (Not personal)

(Verse 1)

So little, so naive

Alone and with so much grief

He couldn't figure out,

what this fight is about?

No one to share,

He thinks, his life isn't fair

Eyes full of wonders,

heart full of pain

(Chorus)

He runs to his room, his fingers in his ears

He is not sure what to do?

You scream, you shout

He asked, "Mom, dad what's this about?"

Scared to death, little boy

He is so scared, scared little child

(verse 2)

Depressed and feeling sad

He thinks his life makes him mad

Sorrowful with thousand thoughts

Well, he shouldn't be feeling this way,

Why for your mistakes he has to pay?

He should be out there with other kids

Having some fun, making some bids

(Chorus)

He runs to his room, his fingers in his ears

He is not sure what to do?

You scream, you shout

He asked, "Mom, dad what's this about?"

Scared to death, little boy

He is so scared, scared little child

Poor little child, runs to his room

so scared, and hiding under his bed

He wants you to stop

He wants to scream out loud

He wants to have a normal life,

a happy life, just like his friends'

Wish everyone could get it,

and make it quit

That's very little to commit

fact about a life, just admit

After all he's just a naive little kid

Author's Note

Hope YOU guys will enjoy this one :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with your thoughts. Kids are effected by violence and anger. The poem held a lot of struggle and emotion. Kids cannot understand the foolishness of the adults. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yeah RIGHT! Thank You so much for your AWESOME review! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

This was superb! You've taken up a really good topic to bring to the front and have expressed the facts clearly and effectively. Really, really well done! :)

So little, so naive
Alone and with so much grief
These two lines alone express such deep misery and evoke a sympathetic outlook towards the child. You've succeeded in making a difference at the very beginning. Great job! :)

He couldn't figure out,
what this fight is about?
The ''?'' at the end of the second verse is grammatically incorrect. You're basically saying he doesn't know what the fight is about. Saying and not asking. Hence, the question mark is inappropriate. If you want to say that the child is asking what the fight is about then you ought to reframe the sentence to ''what is this fight about?''
Eyes full of wonders,
heart full of pain
You've shown the innocence and amazement of a child as is normal in childhood and added the pain of his parents' fight. The effect is remarkable! Hats off! :)

He runs to his room, his fingers in his ears
He is not sure what to do?
You scream, you shout
He asked, "Mom, dad what's this about?"
Scared to death, little boy
He is so scared, scared little child
The chorus is beautiful and heart-touching. Excellently written. :) However, ''he is not sure what to do'' is a statement and not a question. If you want to make it a question, I'd suggest you put a fullstop between ''He is not sure. What to do?'' The chorus, I think is the most effective and touching part in the poem. You've written amazingly well. :)

Poor little child, runs to his room
so scared, and hiding under his bed
He wants you to stop
He wants to scream out loud
He wants to have a normal life,
a happy life, just like his friends'
You've superbly expressed the emotional turmoil faced by the child. :)
Wish everyone could get it,
and make it quit
As I assume, by ''it'' you're talking about ''a normal happy life'' in the first line and ''parental fights'' in the second. The use of ''it'' in consecutive verses leads to a confusion in the meaning. I guess you ought to make the meaning clearer by using the actual word in place of ''it'' in the second line as it gets very confusing otherwise. I might be wrong here about the meaning you intended as I had to read it four times to come to his conclusion. If you mean something else by these lines, I'd be glad to know. :)
That's very little to commit
fact about a life, just admit
After all he's just a naive little kid
I couldn't really understand the first two lines. I finally reached the conclusion that you wanted to say ending parental fights is a necessary thing because the child is very small and it ought to be done for his/her sake and it can be done quite easily. I'm sorry if I sound a little harsh but the poem is beautiful and these words really don't make sense to me and neither do they appear correct. Could you please explain their meaning to me?
The poem is really lovely. You've done a wonderful job. I loved the way you conveyed the emotions and situations of such children so effectively. Keep up the good work! :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

I do really enjoyed it all along the lines, amazing work!

[Destiny Dreamer]

Gracias! :D Thanks a lot! :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome you always!

[B]

one word

Divorce ...... :)


Great job !!!!!

[Destiny Dreamer]

Thanks Nisreenaa for your review! :) Thanks A lot!

[Stephanie Baker]

This is very powerful and made me cry a little and its not right children should suffer if parents are fighting.

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yeah definitely, you are right. Thank A lot Stephanie. Your review means A lot to me! :)

[Rajat malik]

Yeap really I know the feeling of a child living amidst the bullshit fight of his parents.....nicely expressed

[Destiny Dreamer]

OH! Thank You so much Rajat. Thanks :)

[Rajat malik]

You are welcome :)

[~]

There is lots of pain and confusion in the kid's heart. Children are very sensitive and they never should have to go through difficult situations like this. :D

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yup! Really, children are very sensitive. Thank You so much for your amazing review! :)

[Robert]

Writing lyrics is a talent not too many people have, certainly not me. This has a very good flow to it and a topic that needs to be addressed. This could help a lot of children,

[Destiny Dreamer]

You words encouraged me A lot, to write more. Thank You so much! Yeah right. I wish someone could just sing it! :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

Your* My mistake :P

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Interesting. Powerful, valuable and very important message. A very well penned write. Totally loving this one. Funny...i was about to write a poem about this myself... Anyhow, rating 100# and going to my favorites!

[Destiny Dreamer]

Haha I stole your Idea ;) Thank You so much for your POWERFUL review! ;) :) Thanks ^_^

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome.

[Irenic]

a poem which strikes at the walls of melancholy and bounces back make picture of words completely. you have written it very well. your poem's words and every emotion of child could be formed in my mind.

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW! It means a lot to me. Thank You so much dear Irenic :)