He Stayed

Reviews

[AllauraRose]

Where can I find a guy like this, lol. Amazing work, I really enjoyed the read. I love how this also shows that we all have those inner demons, and chapters In our life we don't share. Great job!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Haha! Thanks 😄

[Riddhi]

A very powerful and a poem full of emotions , this is what it is..Though this is just the second poem of yours that i am reviewing , but i feel that you are a really good writer..You know the main quality possessed by a good writer is that even through his few words he can touch someone's heart and I must say you possess that quality..You are among those soulful writers who pour their entire soul in their writings..
Eager to read more of your writings...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks for the review Riddhi

[emipoemi]

The sentiment is powerful! The message is profound! The execution needs some polishing due to some grammatical errors:

- No 'when' needed in Line 2
- Line 3 needs a 'was'
-"Even though her sight has BECOME A blur"
-"And her spectre WAS crawling on her"

And then end with another "he stayed" to really amp up the power, and you got yourself a gem! Well freaking done! I would say this is actually one of your top 3. Fantastic!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you Emi I'll look on the mistakes, thanks for pointing them...

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Giulia King]

I like that your poems have improved immensely. Keep writing!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you Giullia

[¿]

Heart wrenching poems are speciality of some writers....and I guess you too have got that in you!
This is something spectacular that I'd like to read again and again (just for me).....
Mmm...this sits in the eyes!
Well penned😊

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you tahsin😄