You promised

Just imagine a person who knows all the truths about some crimes or injustice, and he hides it and getting away from that.

Turned your back to the truth

Banged your head to the wall

Held yourself from getting down

Cause you promised not to fall..

Closed your eyes even in the dark

Rolled yourself to fit in the box

You care what would it be

But you promised not to talk

Finding yourself through the glass

Trying hard to stop the clock

But the sand in your hand just gonna slip

and you promised not to fall.

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

People need to live with the choices they make and whatever life brings due to those things they keep hidden inside....everyone slips up sometime...promises or no promises...🌹

[H L Rose]

I like the sentiment with "you promised not to fall" and "rolled yourself to fit in the box" I also think is a really good line.

In the first stanza, I think the first two lines flow especially well. The only problem I see is that line two should probably be "on the wall".

In the second stanza, I found each line interesting, but I'm not too sure what you mean in line three. You may want to proof read it and try to make it more clear.

In the third stanza, I think each line is interesting and I find myself having fun analyzing them. They are a bit difficult to understand in relation to one another, but I am not sure if that's a bad thing, because it may just be calling for the reader to analyze them more. The third line however, should probably say "is just gonna slip" or at least have a comma between "hand" and "just".

Once again I like the theme and the repetition of "you promised not to fall". I thoroughly enjoyed reading and analyzing this poem!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks for the visit, I'm glad you liked it, your reviews are helpful

[H L Rose]

Of course! I’m glad!

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The great read from you...
Here,....Justice has been denied!!
All the promises made by heart are to be fulfilled...alongside the body promised to demise if death comes while keeping that promise!!

[Katelyn Kennedy]

Disappointment is an important thing to know how to cope with. think the saddest and most honest thing someone ever told me was that "promises are meant to be broken". It's terribly morbid but part of him was right. I lot of the time we have to face broken promises. You beautifully capture the fact that people will let us down.

[Farhan Shaikh]

yoo...
Thanks for the review...

[AllauraRose]

I liked how you conveyed injustice. The world is unjust and this shows how people turn away from the truth and morals and juts wait for money and power. Great job, I enjoyed it!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much 😄

[AllauraRose]

Anytime!
-Allaura

[prachi prangya agasti]

I loved it. It's short and beautiful.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks Prachi

[Riddhi]

I loved your poem and the way you wrote it..actually when i read it i thought that it can be converted into a good song with a nice music..I really liked it..But it seemed to me as if it was far away from reality , from reality of life..As far as life is concerned its quite different from the ones described in your writing , it is just full of new surprises every day..I loved the way you expressed your idea..
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing..
Riddhi

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks for the lovely review Riddhi 😄

[Harley Quinn]

Love it! :) :) :) Very well described.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you Harley 😄

[barleygirl]

I have to be honest, I’m not sure what your poem is about. But I’ll take a guess. I am getting the vision of a person with many rules & restrictions about life & people. The kind of person who is rigid with pre-conceived ideas & strongly-held opinions. This person tries to control the world around him/her by keeping everything in place with self-promises & unbreakable vows. To me, this is the opposite of how life seems to go – so unpredictable & full of surprises. Once the “control freak” learns to let go of all the rules & promises, he/she can learn that life brings many blessings if we stay open to the possibilities, instead of trying to stay rigid with promises. But your poem doesn’t get to that part. It’s only to draw a word picture of a person imprisoned within his/her own vows & rules (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Farhan Shaikh]

Yeah, it is about a person who is afraid wanna hide, from truth and reality, sorry for not mentioning it in the descy, I'll make the changes... thanks for visiting

[wordman]

sounds like a place to hide from reality

[Farhan Shaikh]

Yess, quite right..