Adventures

Adventures

A Poem by Farhan Shaikh

All those insane calls
From the place that we've never been.
wandering alone
On the strayed paths.
Roads we leave
to follow the trails..
Once again when we do something
For the first time
When we escape the ordinary
To fill our souls..
That's when the Adventure begins..

© 2017 Farhan Shaikh


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Your poem reminds me of a Romanian poem named "O, plecarile, plecarile..."(translation: Oh, departures, departures...) written by Aron Cotrus. In my opinion, both poems contain the same message:
An indomitable human wish. Humans always had the need to know and to see more, a need for travel, a need for change. The verses "All those insane calls
From the place that we've never been." are the perfect image of this wish. The human soul can't be caged, so our solution is traveling. We leave the usual for the exotic until the exotic becomes usual too ("For the first time
When we escape the ordinary
To fill our souls..").


I think you shouldn't use the ellipsis after the words "trails" and "souls" because when you use the ellipsis at the end of the poem, it will give a more intense feeling to the reader. In short, don't use too many ellipses (this opinion is subjective).

In conclusion, I think you wrote a good poem with a good message. I suggest you read the Romanian poem which has the same message as yours because it will teach you how to exaggerate some elements when you write a poem (in a good way).


Good luck!



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Farhan Shaikh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for helping me out...I will read that poem..and I guess I learned something new he.. read more
Jes' Pi

6 Years Ago

You're welcome!



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This is one of your best. You have expressed the true meaning of living and identifying yourself. It feels that this poem marks a beginning to your journey to find yourself. I loved this poem as it is filled with wise words. Keep it up.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Farhan Shaikh

6 Years Ago

I'm really glad you like it
First-timings are real adventures.
A simple but elegant thought which we think deep about when expressed through a poem.
But somehow I can't connect with the first and second halves of your poem.
Anyways, a good one!



Posted 6 Years Ago


Farhan Shaikh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much
I agree my friend. I told my kids. Travel, test life and have fun. Life is a wide open road. Great wisdom shared in your words. Thank you Farhan for sharing the amazing poetry.
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Posted 6 Years Ago


Farhan Shaikh

6 Years Ago

Thanks for your time..means a lot
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
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Personally, I love adventures! I am going to pin this to my desk.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Farhan Shaikh

6 Years Ago

Thank you...😊

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Added on December 25, 2017
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Farhan Shaikh
Farhan Shaikh

Mumbai, India



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