The Dark World

It's been a while

I haven't seen the dawn

I remember old myself

When the sunshine's gone.

I don't know what to do

I don't know where to go.

I'm stuck in this night

For a really long time

There's no one to see

There's no one to talk

Wondering when will I

Stop my lonely walk.

When the rays will

hit into my eyes.?

When will once again

I'll be in the light?

These streets still haunts me

These trees still flaunts me.

I tried to aid but 

I'm still bleeding

Closed my eyes but 

I'm not sleeping.

Tears streaming down from my face

Lost something that i can't replace.

I know I'm full of wounds

But still I stand

These scars on my body

Makes me cry in strand.

Yes i hit the bottom 

But it's not lasting.

Yes I'm knocked down

But I'm not yet pinned

I can see the sky

Without any stars

Only moon up there

With loads of scars.

Ocean here without any waves

Mountains here having no caves

A River taking me nowhere

Flivver I found everywhere.

Maybe I'm staying here 

Or maybe I'll get through

I rather use a comma

Than to use full stop.

Maybe this will hurt me 

But I'm always going 

to be me.

Reviews

[Accalia]

Wow! I'm at a loss of words, I can feel the emotions of depression, sadness, pain, and hope. All that is said as well done at least you are able remain strong enough to be yourself. Thank you for such a wonderful poem!

[lessa (kenzie)]

your last five lines quite intriguing, I really enjoyed this write.

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

Amazing work as always. Amazing.Loved it.

[apennylate]

I'd rather use a comma, than a full stop... That... Utter genius, friend... This was a roller coaster ride... Scars and loads of flaws between... ALWAYS keep being the only thing that works... Yourself...

[Hebe]

This is a journey of pain... highlighted in so many ways that you find your own journey somewhere in there. Thank you for sharing.

[Vic]

I am not usually one for poems, but I found this one easy to read and effective in evoking powerful imagery

[Gaurav]

this is a very nicely written piece. Simply an admiration for the perfect flow and use of words. Keep writing.

[Barbara Walker]

I love the line,"I'd rather use a comma, than to use a full stop." I'm not sure what "Flivver" means. Nor, "make me cry strands." Your meaning to this poem is understood. Loneliness, hurt and loss and many people can identify with that!

[Donicca Dona L]

sometimes in order to find ourself we have to get lost first....
I always lost in a beautiful while reading your work....
thank you for that.
this is what poetry should be about being able to touch the readers heart .

[Haniya]

Very breathtaking and beautifully written.
Well done!