The last note

Ain't anyone found me in the teared shirt,

Cause I've been treated like dirt,

How do I move from this dark desert

The hell so much I'm hurt.

I needed them but they don't,

It's like their heart made of stone.

They all wanna sit on the throne

and threw me on the hell zone.

Spoke words that doesn't made sense

Ain't anyone was in my defense.

Was on my knees and pleading

Show some mercy I'm bleeding.

Put my shoes on your feet

Try to feel what it's like to be me.

They thought I was a piece of joke

They didn't thought that I'm broke

Meanwhile i walk home through the smoke

and they were like "oh look that crazy folk"

If I'm anyone of them 

I would've tried to end this painful fire.

Looked up at the fan and the chair down

Tied up the rope making the end of a clown.

Goodbye note I penned

"MOM, here my story ends".

Reviews

[Unspoken poet]

wow! such raw emotion this write, so poetic as well. this is very well written.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you 😄

[Zoya]

Ah, I can sense much emotion behind this. Most people can relate im sure. Strength and determination are all that takes to thrive in this heartless world. Never give up. Good work!

[Red Rose]

Omg! I've been gone for a while and just look at the way you've grown!! It's well-penned and creative.
I love the last line.. Great way to end a great poem.

[Jiya]

Your writing skills are commendable! The way you have described the tormented soul is amazing! Only a few have the flair of expressing sadness so beautifully.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks so much for that Jiya..it means a lot

[Karisha Nove]

From where i can see this is a life journey of a person who suffered a lot and end up losing his hopes... you able to express those feeling in few words.. Heads off...

[apennylate]

A beautiful and somewhat tragic portrayal.... Smoke and crazy folk... That ending was a neat sum of emotional dismay... I really liked this, and your writing has grown... Excellently penned...

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The words hold a suspense only to leave a pang in the end. Wonderfully portrayed.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you..

[Accalia]

This is a deep emotional piece it grabs your attention, and forces you to read to the very end. I liked it very much and thank you for sharing.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks so much

[Hope]

The last note is so touching...
A rumble of hidden feelings portrayed well in this.
But I noticed some lines that have to be perfected( 5th & 6th) even though the reader can understand what you intended.
Pleasure to read from you!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much

[Sami Khalil]

"Try to feel what it's like to be me.
They thought I was a piece of joke
They didn't thought that I'm broke
Meanwhile i walk home through the smoke"

Nice title and poem. A sad but good one.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you 😊

[Sami Khalil]

Welcome...................