It's You...

It's You,

The one I wake up thinking about, Feeling upset when you're not around.

It's You,

The one I think before falling asleep. Know something you got for me somewhere in deep.

It's You,

The one who makes me to loose my sense. One look of yours makes my heartbeat immense.

It's You,

I was afraid to tell, when you asked who is she. I never believed in love, until I had yours.

Its You,

The one with whom I always loved to be.

I just told you I love you, girl just tell me that you love me.

Reviews

[William Liston]

Very romantic. I like the repetition of "It's you" to emphasize your lover. I also like the ending because it sums up the speaker's thoughts and gives the piece resonance.

Critiques: I noticed some grammar mistakes. First of all, the repeated line "Its You" needs and apostrophe in "It's." Also, the line "makes the heart beats immense" didn't flow well as I read. I suggest changing it to "makes my heartbeat immense."

- William Liston

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you for your kind words and help😊

[yuhee]

And you caught our hearts with this sweet and romantic poem. Great piece.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much

[LKBillips]

Romantic and heartfelt. The pleading vulnerability of voicing it makes that much sweeter. Good job.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you..

[Sikandar Khan]

Nice Poem.........................

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you..

[Wajiha Nayeem]

this is so amazing and romantic.i really like the way you express every little feeling through your write,beautiful.extremely wonderful

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you wajiha

[Wajiha Nayeem]

my pleasure farhan shaikh

[mercy party]

it is so good to have a "You" isn't it?
A good writer is always simple and real.
you bring that every time!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you mercy for your kind words..it means alot

[AshlynnStyx]

I like it. Even with the mild grammatical pauses its pretty.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much

[mou]

it's sweet and beautiful..repetitions of "its u.." is just like a song..

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you..

[Giulia King]

This poem has a sweet, loving flow. :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you gullia😊

[CAPOLAVORO]

It's me? Really? hahaha Just kidding.
Okay this one grabs not only attention but hearts of many women believing true love and chivalry. I hope this could have more lines but all in all it is a good one. Great piece Farhan. Next time, make it a little bit longer for a good flow of emotion. ;)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you , and sure I will make longer next time