i can't help

hair cut. crooked smile.
pleading eyes. uneven looks.
imperfection of the first degree.
reasons to say hello
overshadowed
by reasons to say goodbye.
awkward. disproprotionate.
broken. alone.
happy. content.
pretty eyes. defined jaw.
confidence of the second degree.
and i can't help but wonder-
and i can't help but see-
why i'm so alone.

Author's Note

Another Writing Lab assignment. We were supposed to write what we saw in the mirror.

Reviews

[Cassidy Mask]

One for the favourites i think...
I like the way you use the punctuation it gives the impression of thoughts cut off before they can progress any further, or perhaps statements of fact, with a sense of 'unchangability' - which i highly doubt is a word... :)
Anyway i really liked this, and i felt i understood it completely - it really spoke to me.
It's little things like this that keep me going. Thank You.

Cassidy

[Moki]

I understand exactly. =/

"and i can't help but wonder-
and i can't help but see-
why i'm so alone."


God kid, I love you so much, really I can't say it enough.

[Star]

Hmm. I really don't think poetry should be read aloud, even though most people say it's meant to be that way; your poetry makes me stick to my opinion. Reading it quietly to myself always makes it mean more. I want to know what you mean by the degrees; all I could think of was burns..

Oh, you're never alone! All of your poems give off that vibe. Then again... mine do too.
Teen angst! (:

[.:Naiira Harlow:.]

Maybe a little to much punctuation. It does seem very genuine though. I usually feel alone when I look in the mirror as well.
-Twilight