you are the water

"I move my lips just so you won't have to."

your fingers pour like water down my spine
and around my neck and down my side
until i'm soaking wet.
you break down your sentences into letters
and wrap them back around your tongue
and all you can taste is
i love you.
the steam of the windows and the steam of our breath
tangle and condense into drops of water
that fall through the hour glass;
drowning whatever time we had left.
but you are the water and i am the sun;
and you turn to vapor beneath my nose.
the the curves of your hips turn to waves
and the words on our lips form sentences with each other;
they mesh together between the smiles on our faces
which seem obselete with our eyes closed.

Reviews

[We are young.]

This is so sweet. I loved it, its stunning.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very beautiful poem, nicely written. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Star]

Rain over the ocean... I was thinking of that while reading this. It's my favorite so far. Your last lines are always killers. ♥

[Annelise]

This is breathtaking. You've captured that moment where nothing exists except that other person tangled up in you. The thrill of being in love, well before the whole thing goes to s**t that is. You have the ability to get what you need to say across in very little words. There is a similar writer (Brian James), if you have not read his books, do so, they are magnificent.

"you break down your sentences into letters
and wrap them back around your tongue
and all you can taste is
i love you."

Just stunning.

[Pauline Marie Daley]

Amazing poem! I can just see her hips turn to waves! So heartfelt and true. Great job!

[No]

wow. i don't get any points for a post this small, so i must mean it. this is absolutely what the post below me said, love on paper. or a computer screen in fact. and it's so incredibly gorgeous that i want to wrap it up and keep it and wish that i was that girl.
so yeah, this is why people started writing poetry in the first place; to reach what you accomplished through this.

[Pointblank]

Absolutely love on paper. OMG! OMG! I want words to come to me like that. I want a man to come to me like that. I have no advice for you because you have me beaten. Wonderful words wonderfully used.

[Zatoichi]

i found this in the Clown's library. i'm glad i took it down off the shelf because it's a wonderful read.

[Ms Jessica Renee]

Exquisite work yet again my friend.

[Legion]

Beautifully done. Hope the one you are writing about (if an actual person) has read this. Very well written. Lovely work.