Night

Just came out of nowhere.

The hawk spreads its wings

And soars into the sky

In the throat of the lark

The gentle note dies

 

Flitting through the trees

A deadly game of tag

Their shadoes follow

With a slight, unpleasant lag

 

Time stands still

A deathly trance

Nature watches transfixed

Their mortal dance

 

A scream pierces the air, and the heavens weep

The devil laughs loud and long.

The winds howl, the oceans roar.

An eerie swan song.

 

The spirit moves on

Its work is done.

Light is past

And darkness begun.

SOUL LESS

Author's Note

Suggest a better title...and some constructive criticism. Enjoy!

Reviews

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Mayhaps the game of death? I don't know, but this is amazing!!!!!!! I love your choice of words, how elegant they sound. And I love the way you showed the larks death like a loss of innocence, "...the heavens weep/ the devils laugh, loud and long" I have to admit, this is one of the best random pieces I can recall reading:) Great Work!!!:)

[Sarah]

nice work

[Bridget Murphy]

Wow, this is an amazing poem! I especially love the line " The winds howl, the oceans roar,An eerie swan song." Terrific!!!

[stars are far]

This is well written ..great work :)

[Black]

it is their shadows,
It is beautifull,
nice work ,
uhm another title,
The start?
or the silence?
i dont know

[Canicus]

I like this. good job keep it up

[Just Cat]

One thing I got from this poem. You're very observant.
I like the imagery, the feel of it being light and dark in one. Its a really nice piece.
A beautiful write :)

p.s. Hope you don't mind the random review!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

i really enjoyed this, the last stanza is really a great ending i think :D this is quite well done

[Shy Girl]

Hmm... :) Alittle off the flow in the middle... But I thought it was really out of nowhere...just like you witness a hawk above the tree lines. Hearing the screams and knowing it's hunting, seaking prey... :0 Beautiful... I actually have 2 hawks that live in the acres on my property and hear them call each day on my deck. They are absoulte power and beauty to behold...sometimes they sit on the branch above my deck and stare for a split second of recongnition the resume thier hunt... :) Got lost a second... Title is where you start from and it sums the piece up in one word...I like it... :)))))

[OneWingLeft]

I really loved this poem no criticism to give, you are amazing.

[LynLee]

Wow that was amazing.....so much emotion.... love it