The Rose Garden

Description of the deepest recesses of a mind.

The misty rain

Falls down again,

Into the rose garden.

The wispy train

Turns back again

Into the rose garden.

 

‘Cause I feel so alone,

Lost in the icy cold

Of my mind.

 

The firm hard land

Crumbles to sand,

Within the rose garden.

Fearful you stand,

Lost in the land

Within the rose garden.

 

‘Cause I feel so alone,

Lost in the icy cold.

Dead in immortal eyes:

Torn roses of my mind.

 

Tattered, he knows,

Lost in the throes

Inside the rose garden.

Broken, he rose,

Dead, I suppose,

Inside the rose garden.

 

‘Cause I feel so alone,

Lost in the icy cold.

Dead in immortal eyes:

Torn roses of my mind.

 

The misty rain,

Thrown back again,

Dies in the rose garden.

The steady wane;

The moon again

Dies in the rose garden.

 

I try to stay alive

Without wondering why.

Out of my deathly tomb,

Waiting, somewhere, is you.

 

‘Cause I feel so alone,

Lost in the icy cold.

Dead in immortal eyes:

Torn roses of my mind.

Reviews

[Gheeneil]

Packed with sad emotions which are emphasized by the repetition of lines. Nice one.

[Aria]

Very well written. The flow and imagery were seamless and you made me feel my land crumbling to sand and the roses being torn from my mind. Very imaginative and well thought out. Good work!

[Joseph - Michael]

Very well expressed details on being depressed and all alone into the world of self imaginations like that...

It kind of reminded me one of those Edgar Allan Poe's works... I can't remember which one was that, but it's kind of similar. Maybe that was "The Raven" or something else...

Anyway, very nice piece you've created along with perfect rythmnes all the way... So, it's all still great tho...

[THE LOST ROSE]

Nice piece. I enjoyed the journey and the rythmn. I am about to start my work day and the cadence and words will play in my head all night long. Very nice write.