Empty Truth

How do you keep living when the one you love dies?

Surrender your life to me

In this darkness, night;

In this pale moonlight.

I break.

If only I could take it away.

I'm screaming at you.

 

Do you remember a time

When you were only mine?

 

Heartbreak,

Fading like the misty cold.

I wake

To find this empty truth that I'm alone.

Listen to the pulse beat

Inside my head.

Then I'm not truly dead.

 

My body's frozen,

Delicate with ice cold snow,

Layered on top of me,

Piled on the withered stone.

A single name unknown to the world.

The blood pumps silent through me.

I know that I must go.

 

Heartbreak,

Fading into pure white snow.

I wake

To find this empty truth that I'm alone.

Listen to the pulse beat

Inside my head.

Then I'm not truly dead

Even if you are.

 

The light is falling away,

The music box rings softly.

I'm here to stay.

A silent teardrop

Upon your tomb.

I wish I could share your doom.

 

Do you remember what you meant to me?

In your glassy eyes, can you see me?

Frightened by the path you set ahead of me.

I'd rather share your fate than face my destiny.

 

Heartbreak,

Fading into nothing, gone.

I wake

To find this empty truth that I'm alone.

Listen to the pulse beat

Through my head.

Why can't I be dead?

I'm not truly dead.

Reviews

[Bluerealis]

This is actually one of my favorites to be honest. All the physical elements just intertwine with the emotions into a perfect blend of words. And the symbols, like the empty tomb and glassy eyes and the music box, they substitute a wordy poem into a smooth explanation that couldn't get any clearer; using visual instead of vocal, showing instead of telling.

I loved it.

[WayzWithWordz]

Ms Blueye Wolf said it! you turn a story that could be long and boring into a short concise poem that grabs the imagination
keep them coming you are very talented

[Adela Muresan]

Well I think you should sratch the last verse...it doesn't fit somehow..
Anywayz, great imagery and flow. I like the macabre abordation over love , it's very original.

A.M.

[Anima Inspired]

Heartbreaking... The thing I like most about this is the way that you bring together your emotions (the cold saddness) with the actual "cold" reality around you in the snow...great duality. Good imagery, symbolism, and I like the form and flow too...nicely done.

"Surrender your life to me
In this darkness night?"

"darkness night" doesn't sound right to me, but aside from that it's enchantingly written.