Hollow

The hollow pieces of my mind..

It hurts..

Not enough though..

For me to see the edge..

The pain has to be worse..

I need to see the darkness in front of me..

And behind me..

I gladly welcome the bit of light that I have now..

But I’m a lost cause..

I know that..

Whatever any of you think..

I’m the one of us still broken..

And yet..

I’m in love..

But this love for me seems dark and cruel..

But I love her so much..

But the darkness pouring from my head..

It’s more than the light coming from her..

I’d best look forward to being dead..

A soldier screams in my head “Sir Yes Sir”

Break me down..

Marry me..

Or just f*****g bury me..

It’s all up to you..

Anette..

Feels good to finally put her name on paper..

But Sarah..

My girlfriend..

You mustn’t be worried..

This is just something my head needs to clear..

I love you..

Remember me..

Even without the pathetic bullshit I say..

Like suddenly breaking into tears..

Or wanting to kill myself..

Just remember me..

Forever..

 

And it’s merely A Fallen Hero to you..

I shall hail King Scum..

I might even bow to someone..

Reviews

[OtherWorldWoman]

This is so sad...it tears me apart to read it. I feel your pain and in all of its sadness if these are your true feelings, that means it is a good poem. So, well done. And I hope things get better for you. Don't give up.

[+Naomi+]

This is amazing..

[Shy Girl]

This was very true of heart. No flowery words or floating phrases, straight as an arrow...working things in the head can be hard on others, true. But I think that you came through in this piece...I enjoyed the emotion in the harsh wording and how you resolved your crossroad of the two lives loved. Very moving... :)

[Carrion.]

pure,raw emotion. I love it.

[nevermindfan1991]

Great! This is the raw, uninhibited passion that I enjoy reading in poetry. If you didn't know I though this was a great poem. I throughly enjoyed reading this poem. I felt the pain you were experiencing. I also enjoyed the last stanza
"And it’s merely A Fallen Hero to you..
I shall hail King Scum..
I might even bow to someone.."

Incredible write. Incredible.

[Dayran]

Possible and impossible looking at each other in the mirror. Only love creates a bridge between the two.

[Black]

i love the last stanza!
good job