Hollow

The hollow pieces of my mind..

It hurts..

Not enough though..

For me to see the edge..

The pain has to be worse..

I need to see the darkness in front of me..

And behind me..

I gladly welcome the bit of light that I have now..

But I’m a lost cause..

I know that..

Whatever any of you think..

I’m the one of us still broken..

And yet..

I’m in love..

But this love for me seems dark and cruel..

But I love her so much..

But the darkness pouring from my head..

It’s more than the light coming from her..

I’d best look forward to being dead..

A soldier screams in my head “Sir Yes Sir”

Break me down..

Marry me..

Or just f*****g bury me..

It’s all up to you..

Anette..

Feels good to finally put her name on paper..

But Sarah..

My girlfriend..

You mustn’t be worried..

This is just something my head needs to clear..

I love you..

Remember me..

Even without the pathetic bullshit I say..

Like suddenly breaking into tears..

Or wanting to kill myself..

Just remember me..

Forever..

 

And it’s merely A Fallen Hero to you..

I shall hail King Scum..

I might even bow to someone..

Reviews

[Brook Hughes]

This poem is to the point, and like Coyote Poetry said… very direct. It flows well and my favorite part is,
But this love for me seems dark and cruel..
But I love her so much..
But the darkness pouring from my head..
It’s more than the light coming from her..
I’d best look forward to being dead..
A soldier screams in my head “Sir Yes Sir”
Break me down..
Marry me..
Or just f*****g bury me..
Soooo awesome:) Keep writing

[Coyote Poetry]

A direct poem. I like the raw and honest words you write. Poetry need to be strong and the words making strong points. You poetry does. Thank you for a excellent poem,.
Coyote

[Fairytale]

Nicely written with light, easy to follow phrases. I like the fact that you directed this poem to people by naming them. It made the poem more personalised.

[roy mccarthy]

wow,
this is deep,
last stanza....awesome!

[Daytonight]

So very poignant and yet so full of love. Keep on penning.

[Chris]

A real emotional impact AND thoughts needing expressed.

Chris

[stars are far]

This was so great and touching ...

[Becky C Strukamp]

Quite captivating

[Tasha]

This is so sad but still captivating. Things will get better, don't give up.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Namelezz]

This made me cry, I'm still so confused. I don't know what you want anymore...

~Namelezz~