Loosely Based Thoughts..

In a world filled

With something as poetic and pathetic as truth…

What’s left for any of us?

Am I the only one who thinks of screaming

As this pathetic world rapes me..

Or am I just a guy who dare speak his mind?

Or am I just out of line because I’m sober?

As you can hear..

My urn is calling me…

Why it has to be this way is out of my comprehension..

Life’s just a butch I guess..

I finally found someone..

Who made me think..

And old friend..

I still don’t get it though..

How come it takes so much to convince a person

That you’re not suicidal anymore?

Takes a mildly interesting conversation with the infantile topic of teenage depression and suicide..

But she got me thinking.

What if my whole concept of understanding human beings might even just be loosely based on my hate towards humanity..

That would make everything I write wrong..

And if I can’t write truthfully then I actually don’t want to write at all..

Just loosely based thoughts..

A Fallen Hero - Loosely Based Thoughts..

Written : 10/02/2011

Dedication : No one..

Author's Note

What do you think.. xD
Honest Opinion

Fallen

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You open a lot of question with this poem. Myself I want honest words. A liar word is useless. That is one reason I dislike all politicians.(A few are OK). I like the truth and knowing what the world really is. I lost two brothers to suicide. Suicide pissing me off. There left a lot of sadness and babies in bellies who are asking question about boys who gave up. I was like you. I was filled with anger and desire to do anything but stand still. I would really punish the world then lay dead with the world looking down at me. Saying just another useless piece of flesh gone. A powerful poem. You made me think.
Coyote

[Brad]

truth? reality? life? yeah, kicks a person in the face...my solution was to kick that b*****d back, knock it's teeth out against a cement wall, and kick it's kidneys until they piss blood....but that's just me

[OT]

ahhh one of your best I'd say - it's philosophical in a way and questioning of the world in some respects - questioning the ideals of what you're being told etc. very nice!

[Chelsea]

One little thing before I review--- A typo on like 11! You spelled "b***h" wrong!
I like it, all these thoughts your prose. Very deep :) A thought provoking peace.
I must disagree with you though. I don't think truth is pathetic. If everybody lied, think of how much worse the world would be. Those who speak the truth keep the world at some tolerable state. Just a thought.
I also like your part about telling people your suicidal. I know that it must be hard convincing people you've changed ways :/ Sometimes it's hard to break the mold you've laid.
A very good write, the flow, imagery, thoughts. Very deep!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Very thought provoking...and I'm glad those deathly thoughts don't come as hard as they might have done...
Wonderful job, and very honest as well- that is how all poetry should be.