Empty Words

Writers block trying to go away

Staring at a blank page

Wanting to write

I can’t 

Not today

Not tomorrow 

Not Ever

Staring at the girl I like

Wanting to kiss her

I Can’t 

Not today

Not tomorrow

Not ever

Staring at my guitar

Wanting to play

I can’t 

Not today

Not tomorrow

Not ever

Staring at a page with words

Wanting to be proud

I Can’t 

Not today

Not tomorrow

Not Ever

A Fallen Hero - Empty Words

Written : 12/01/2011

Dedication : No One 

Author's Note

Honest Opinion

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

Staring.... I hope I snap out of it... maybe I need some rest and look to a new horizon... maybe the sun shines differently on the other side of the house.

[Drako]

its interesting to watch you grow as a writer. each piece shows perhaps a hint of maturity, and definitely improvement. i'm still waiting on some happier material but nevertheless i enjoy your work

[Color of the Iris]

This was a better poem, I believe. :)

It flowed very smoothly, like water trickling down glass. Even though you kept saying you couldn't do these things, it all still made sense. I liked it. 100/100

~ Iris ~

[Star Bright]

I like how it flows. Really creative and I can relate in some of it. The structure is also nicely done. (:

[A Risen Heroine.]

I like this one.
The repetition helps this poem very well.
Kepp up the awesome work and thanks for sharing my friend! :D
~AFallenHeroine~

[Chelsea]

Much better!
I like how you tell two seperate stories here. One of your sorrows about this girl / a fun guitar one! Creative how you switch between the two!
I think one of you better pieces of work :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime doing nothing is Ok. Allow us time to think. I wish I could play a instrument. Music can take you to a better place. A very strong poem. When all things seem to be going wrong. Sometime nothing is cool. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Kathryn Saunders]

I really liked the repetition in you poem, it gave it a great rhythm and flow I have to agree, i think this is by far your best piece. While it's not a blatant as the others, it show you for you.

[E.H. Monroe]

The best piece I think. The repetition that is usually c**k blocking the poem is helped along by the things that you are refusing. Has a real edgar allen poe feel, and the finality words like can't won't and never bring more of that patent end game you spit so much.

nice work and the form and style is maturing

Get em King of Denmark

[OT]

nice!! I like the structure! and the repetition of the last three lines in each stanza - I would perhaps add something that goes against the rest of them - like maybe something you would do today, tomorrow or something like that to contrast with the rest!! but it's pretty strong as it stands and I like!!