Disappointment

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Disappointed again

Where are you my friend

I need you.

You disappointed me

Did the unthinkable 

I think I started to like you more

When you didn’t want me no more

I’ll live

I’ve been through these times before

I’ve played with insanity

One to many times

F**k… 

I feel like a regular angsty teen

I’m not.. 

I can seriously say 

I’ve been through a lot more than most teens.

I survived.. 

Even when I was breaking down.

I held on.

Because of you.

Because I love you

And because I hate them

The hatred grows and grows

Soon it’ll reach the point.

“Psycho kid from Denmark does a school shooting. Kills twenty-eight people”

Yea that’s where I am now.

I want to do it.

I feel like I would win..

And in the end I’d just kill myself…

I’m not like you, I just f**k up

I hate you

I hate you

I hate all of you

I despise you

Your false ideals of a heartfelt romance

They are my enemies

They can’t hurt me

Yet they hurt me all the time

Everyday every minute.

So this is the end

A Fallen Hero - Disappointment

Written : 11/01/2011

Dedication : To The Ones I Hate. To Toke my best friend. And Sandra.

Author's Note

Honest opinion.
A poem of the disappointment i feel at the moment

Reviews

[Color of the Iris]

Wow... let's just hope you don't commit a mass murder... and that you don't kill yourself in the process... I know people say that everything will get better in time, and that time heals all wounds, and that I just usually tell them to stick it, but you're life only sucks because you surround yourself with the people who make it suck. Ignore all the bad, and survive with the battle scars while you smile at the good. 100/100

~ Iris ~

[Frifthor (D^2)]

Well done with the poem. The tone speaks well to the reader, and the growth from what can be considered mildly pissed off to becoming a homicidal tone wrks well, demonstrating the downfall of the man. Don't shoot anyone, but good job.

[A Risen Heroine.]

Sorry I disappointed you... :(
~A Fallen Heroine~

[Drako]

wow, that's possibly the darkest poem you've written so far. hopefully we won't have to read that byline. when the rawness goes away, the healing begins

[Coyote Poetry]

Disappointment, anger and being pissed off in the feel of the poem. Those feelings mean you are still alive and can get up and show the world you are still here. A powerful poem of emotion and disappointment. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Kathryn Saunders]

It's a very well written poem format and flow wise, i did see a few lines that could be revised, but it is not needed. I agree with Monroe that only the surface does this poem seem angry. it has a very deep meaning of a person that is more hurt then anything. you allow you emotions to show through brilliantly in your work.

But don't hide your true self with merely anger. express all your feelings of sorrow, loneliness, and everything in between. overall, very nice. 10/10

[E.H. Monroe]

There are a few things going on in this piece, the least of which is anger. I see that on surface, but when the a*s end of this thing turns it is full of a certain sadness. You try and give it a hide, but it comes through. Spread it all out, work it out before the blow up my brotha.

In the end, we all just wanna breathe comfortable.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

man, I love the depressions act by the end of the line...I feel you mate, keep writing, hurm...it's been a while since I read and write anything like this...

[Life Is Blue]

A great poem full of emotions.. I wish i could say more than that.
Even though you shouldn't go on a massacre on your school.

Great read, thanks for publishing.