I'll Keep On Begging

Another new style

Suddenly I feel so insecure

I want to be totally sure

If I trust myself enough

To show my self in this light

F**k this night.

I hate it.

I feel insecure

And loved

I don’t know why I feel shocked

But I do.

I know I do

I played with my feelings so now

They must die

I have to burn the feelings

Just like a f*****g rope

F**k this depression 

It makes me insecure

Farewell to skyway

Farewell to it all

I wish to god that I was worthy

Worthy of killing myself

But then I’d be a puppet 

In a freak show 

And then they would control me

Hell they must never control me

They will never win

Only darkness and depression wins.

Kill me please

I’m begging for it

Just kill me please

I’ll never stop begging till I’m dead 

A Fallen Hero - I'll Keep On Begging

Written : 09/01/2011

Dedication : The Voices In My Head

Author's Note

Another new style i'm trying out.

Honest Opinion

Reviews

[Drako]

still with the complete darkness, i see. and this is a more dangerous darkness. this is the darkness of despair. to beg for death, their must be despair. but death is a finality of sorts to most. don't beg for death, beg for peace.

[Color of the Iris]

Again... your sadness just slowly slurs down the page like a thick liquid... you speak as though their is no light beyond the darkness... and that's what makes your work so captivating... 100/100

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words and emotion in the poem. The flow and story is very powerful. Death is a dead-end. Leave no opening for the possibility of new adventures and experiences. A very good poem.
Coyote

[E.H. Monroe]

Sometimes sprewing the feeling is all we got before the ax falls. The style is growing, just try a different set up.
Align your s**t differently. Mix it up, let people see more sides then just the, "hey this is a fallen poem"
Let your big words sit by themselves
run your rhymes together instead of anchoring the line.
If you're goin gto experiment, really go all out.
and let's see what we have to work with.

Nice job

[A Risen Heroine.]

I like the way some of the words rhymes.
I like the new style.
Thanks for sharing and keep up the awesome work Fallen!
~A Fallen Heroine~