An undedicated note

Read the title? xD

Here I go

Writing to you again

The innocence of having nothing to gain

Or even something to lose

All these unspoken words 

You never get to read

I want to scream this at you

But I know that I can’t

It could destroy the broken foundations even more

It would f**k me over

Or just beat me again

Am I blinded again? 

Will I ever find a friend?

No! I won’t stand

Stand and not be affected seeing how I’d love to kill this

No matter what

I will stand up

I will rid myself of the curse that drives me

This hate that pushes me forward

Farewell to you my dear

Just f**k off now

I Hate You!'

A Fallen Hero - An Undedicated Note

Written : 08/01/2010

Author's Note

Honest Opinion

Reviews

[E.H. Monroe]

The f**k you here is self explanitory. Nothing drives an enemy crazy like a heart f**k you that is subtle and not so much bulldozed.

Sucker punch em in the mouth, but pull the 2x4 when the time is right.

The power is there oh King of Denmark
and the style is evident

[Drako]

wow, still angry i see. and this time you didn't aim it at a person. i suppose you could if you really wanted to. but this seems more like a f**k you to everyone that ever wronged you. good one

[Color of the Iris]

Nothing but raw emotion and power... great job! 100/100

~ Iris ~

[Red Brick Keshner]

Sounds like the vengeance of the wounded heart: "you eff me, I eff you back..." sort of thing. The tone allows us to witness that this poem has progressed from the initial depression to the denial and now to the lashing out. We await to see the next phase unfold.

[Crowley]

Honestly angry for sure, but thats the point of writing something like this I think. The writing was very good and the point well taken. We really can't let anyone hold us back, we just let time carry us along and nurse us until the pain subsides a bit and then get ready to show the world just how a*s we an kick....write on. Oh and it always feels good to drop the "F" bomb when writing....I am a fan of a well placed f**k.

[A Risen Heroine.]

I don't know what makes me like this piece.
I like the use of words.
Keep up the fantastic work.
You sure will find a friend again! (: