Don't Ask of Me

Just something I threw together one night...

You, dearest lover,

   Mean more than words convey.

To be with one another,

  Brings hope to my next day.

But do not ask me to give,

  My heart unguarded to you.

For as long as I live,

  That will be one thing I'll never do.

       Why, you ask, must I refuse?

       How could this be what I choose?

I've found it safer to stay apart,

  Then risk inevitable pain.

For if I will but guard my heart,

  There'll be no loss, no gain.

       How could one so young as I,

       Wish for love to simply die?

It comes and goes as it desires,

  Leaving its victims in its wake.

It uses, then forces passion's fire,

  To simply drown in Lost Love's lake.

So, dear lover, don't ask of me,

  To set my heart yet once more free.

For I promise this will never be,

  And I should have to leave you then.

Author's Note

I'm definitely no poet, but I've been reading a bunch of poetry lately, so I guess I just got into the mood. Feel free to say whatever about it, I already know it's novice work.

Reviews

Amazing writing skills here. You did a good job! Thanks for sharing.

[shoaib]

great work with this, :)

[fatalsymphonies]

I like the way this is written, the way it indents in different places, the message is good and your story is rendered well. Good write.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a beautiful poem, great Rhyme and Rhythm to it.. definitely a great start, but you are no novice. Keep writing, you are well on your way to greatness!

[Just Me]

I thought this was really good. Keep it up!!!

[White Ink]

i like it a lot, n I'm sure you're gonna do great in poetry. great start!

[Rossen]

Words spilt like milk on the table, not so sure, how she is able,
but we are on the same path, your breath is not wasted
seems old soul to me more then a fable.. moved someone today(me Rossen)
polish your syllables feel your muse, give up yourself and ride on this wind ...

Nice work keep them rolling

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

You are a good poetess and you display good talent, keeping the heart safe and never giving it away. Good poem.