Edge of the world

At the edge of the world you and I were standing,
That moment our souls were demanding.
I felt like it was some kind of redemption,
I couldn't feel the stronger affection.
Everything was a glowing light,
And there was no depth or height.
Were we in another dimension?
Like it was a new world invention.
Sweet like a bubble gum,
Again I want this dream to come.
As a neverland rainbow train,
Fast like a cold winter rain.

Author's Note

I woke up in my bed, and BAM inspiration. I haven't dreamed this tho. :/
Thanks for reading. :D

Reviews

[Mr.Cardigan]

I really like this I always enjoy reading your work

[R.A. Youngblood]

I appreciate that, thanks.

[patricia]

Rhyme for me doesn't always work, unless the last word of one line rhymes with first word of next line, instead of at the end. but loved neverland rainbow train.

[Shaquana Adams]

Romantic and lovely. Maybe internal rhyme would work better instead of external for this poem. Overall, nice work :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, you're right. Thank you :D

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Sounds romantical good work

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you :D

[Anand Sehgal]

subject matter is good. But The rhyming should be done a bit more carefully. Overall good attempt. enjoyed :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, I always had issues with rhyming. Thank you :D