Dead nature

Look,

A bird flying above the reticent rocks.

Listen,

The waves are crashing off the docks.

Feel,

The breeze craving for your neck.

Recede,

Just like the parts from an old wreck,

Because the nature doesn't like you, anymore.

Sink,

In the sadness where the birds don't twitter.

Wan,

Because the darkness is their babysitter.

Crawl,

Because the nature scorns you.

Beg,

There's nothing more you can do.

Walk,

Throught the forest, so dark, opaque.

Cry,

Because the dark ages are awake.

Fade,

The oak is bleeding..

Close your eyes,

It's branches are reaching

The wondrous sky.

But it's too far away..

 

Author's Note

I love this poem. It needed a much more time and inspiration. :P Tell me if there's any grammar mistakes or something. :D

Reviews

[The dark story]

Your image is being portrayed here very vividly with those impeccable diction…making out those chaotic touches and guilt quite clear in those lines. I really loves this poem and the very theme you have worked on. I surmise,we are facing few of those things today…yet inspite of knwing that it is ouw own fault,we scarcely "really" care to erase it. Loved the emotions you penned in here. Thanks for sharing. Pen on!!!

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, there are some connections between. I'm glad that you like it, thank you very much! :D

[Mr.Cardigan]

this is absolutly beautiful

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you.

[joshua deathdealer]

I really like the use of the senses among other things. This went very well.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thanks dude :)

[quixotic_rose]

This is an excellent descriptive poem, you use the imagination and senses wonderfully. I feel like I'm trying to escape this dark forest. What gripping word usage. Lovely work !

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much buddy :D

[quixotic_rose]

ANYTIME! :)

[luna11]

This is beautifully written! I really enjoyed reading it:)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thanks.. ^^

[Chris]

This one is right and STRONG just as it stands.

[Reeti]

The similes and comparisons in this poem are what i like best. The rhyming effect has enhanced the meaning of the poem very well. Then, there's the subtle darkness in its theme. It induces a feeling of hopelessness artistically. This is one of the poems i've enjoyed reading most this year. Keep it up! =)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Thank you very much :D

[Fréyjä Helv..]

I like this better. I like the flow to this one and the concept

[Fréyjä Helv..]

I like this better. I like the flow to this one and the concept

[Blue Ivory]

Deep and dark. Haunting. Been a while since I've seen you here. Always a pleasure reading your dark poetry. You're talented :)