Haiku

 

 

 

 

 

 

It's destined to be

Broken for eternity

Typical for me.

Author's Note

Maybes it's not really a Haiku because apparanly it's supposed to be about nature? I dunno, don't really care, it still goes '5, 7, 5' :P x

Reviews

[BigDaddySiddle]

very japanese-like... Simon likes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest words. In 10 words. A lot of emotion. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[roy mccarthy]

japanese haiku's are usually about nature,
but i've written haiku's about all sorts of things,
i like it!
and it is 5-7-5!

[Allie :)]

Haikus are great for drawing inspiration, so you can write on, and I've always liked them, and you've taken them to a wbole different level.

There are so many different way that you could have taken this, and you've done a great job with selecting the few words that you need to portray your thoughts.

I would've loved to see a couple of more stanzas (with the same 5,7,5 syllable pattern, of course) :) I want to know the story behind these words.

[Aidz]

Close enuff my my reckoning ...well done its purdy kewl

[Skoo.]

Yeah, was it me that told you the nature thing?
I forget. xD
I think this might be a senryu, Idk.
Either way, the syllables and lines are spot on, there's a pivotal point, it's in present tense, and it is a really good poem regardless of genre.
Well done (: xx

[Kenneth The Poet]

I fail at haiku writing too, but this is a nice piece of work.

[StarSandwich]

Short but good. I like it, :D

[Hello, Goodbye]

awesome poetic piece of brevity.. I love it.. saying much in as little as possible..

[joshua deathdealer]

Awesome. Short and powerful.