My Rescuing Angel

The image of 'Perfect'

A picture of you,

Whenever you leave,

My heart leaves too.

 

I long to see

Your cutie smile,

Your hair, your eyes,

I'll miss for a while.

 

The minute I set

My eyes on you,

Is the second my heart

Is no longer in two.

 

But back in place,

Where it belongs,

When I see you,

I hear distant songs..

 

.. Of heavens and angels,

By far, you're one there,

My angel sent to me,

For my heart, so bare..

Reviews

[Matthew vonHone]

Good as always.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Great tribute to that Angel watching over you.

[Joshua J. Certain]

Cute and emotional vary good write and well layed out

[StarSandwich]

Awhh, love which is so sad. xD cutee

[joshua deathdealer]

I hear distant songs...I love it Jenny. Good work.

[Helpless]

awww.... so much love here.... sad, but sweet!

[Allie :)]

I like how this takes a crush, (I think?) to a whole different level.
If you had taken this just one stanza longer, I think that it might have ruined the entire piece. You stopped at just the right time, and executed your thoughts flawlessly.
But there's just one thing!
Cutey-Cutie

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and sweet poem of love. I like the complete poem. Love support to be kind and warm. I like the ending to the outstanding poem of love.
Coyote

[Kenneth The Poet]

Very nice format, I think you could turn this into a song for sure. Very evocative.

[Enjoy]

Another good one. I've noticed a lot of your poems [even the one with five-line verses] manage to sneak into ABCB format [second and final lines rhyme].

Although I still have two or three read requests to go through [and you may have beat me to this], you should try alternate rhyme schemes like Shakespeare/English sonata format or something and see what you could do with it :)