Revenge

Revenge is sweet

Like the sugary lies being poured from your mouth.

I know you don't actually care,

So this is why right now,

My plan commenses.

Watch your back,

I'll be watching.

You'll be sorry that sweet treacle left your lips.

I'll be in your darkest nightmares,

Your most frightening fears.

The pleasure of you

Petrified,

Excites

Me.

You should think next time you try to hurt a girl,

With the sickest mind you can find.

I'll be waiting until you least expect it.

I'm warning you now.

Run.

The electric is rushing though my veins.

Enticing.

Pleasure.

The feeling that I need.

All just from seeing you being torn apart.

Emotionally and physical.

Goodbye my love.

Revenge is sweet.

Just like the sweet syrup that pours from your veins.

Right now.

Author's Note

This is weird.. never wrote like this before, and it doesn't even have personal meaning :') cool :L xx

Reviews

[Allie :)]

The fact that you capitalized every letter starting the line is immensly irritating, and you might want to fix this.

Honestly, I think poetry is all about stereotypes if you want your piece to be best understood. I LOVE the fact that I perfectly understood everything about this piece, and related to your emotions, yet you discribed the rush in a way that I've never seen before.
Your way of writing is very unique, and I really like that! Congrats!

[Duane Klinger]

Amazing! I loved the second line and the second to last line. I have been broken hearted but I am one of those rare individuals who didn't want revenge and yet I felt many of these emotions. It is hard to believe you didn't write this from a personal experience. Very creative in any case. Nice job!
MKLINE

[Sarah Morgan]

I read this and thought "This dude is going to regret losing this brilliant mind" .., but then I read the authors note adn seen that it didn't really have personal meaning to you and to write like that off of the top of your head yes is indeed cool. I think many broken-hearted will read this and take solace in the fact that they may get some empowerment from reading this. Kudos!

[Sarah Hobbit]

very interesting poem :-)

[Ruth]

Free form exorcism! lol
A trail of influences....this is cool love!
xx

[Aidz]

Very kewl poem indeed, great that you were able to extend out to write this, keep it up

[Naomi Roseღ]

I agree with roy mccarthy; it sounds as if you are murdering a person with words. I loved this poem. I could relate a lot to it. Great write, Jenny :) 100/100

[roy mccarthy]

sounds like you're ready to murder someone!
cool poem though!

[Helpless]

but its still a very strong write even though it didn't come from a personal experience of yours. sometimes that is the best way for us to grow as writers, to write using our imagination :)

[Veronica Chandler]

The best revenge is living well, being happy and whole! The structure and flow are very interesting in a good way.