"Back on the road,
The white, lined sheets,
Back on the road,
Where I'm destined to be."
Wonderful and powerful lines, Jenny! This is such a nice poem! Thanks for sharing! Indeed, we all plan our own escape from this world, to live in peace with ourselves!
Mk.t.g
"Back on the road,
The white, lined sheets,
Back on the road,
Where I'm destined to be."
Wonderful and powerful lines, Jenny! This is such a nice poem! Thanks for sharing! Indeed, we all plan our own escape from this world, to live in peace with ourselves!
Mk.t.g
You do work magic, Jenny... taking wordless echoes and giving them a voice... letting us all feel the anguish of wanting to put our souls on the page. Please don't ever stop.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Well, although I seem to be appreciated, I may have to start writing again :p got a new one up today.. read moreWell, although I seem to be appreciated, I may have to start writing again :p got a new one up today if you would like to read it? (:
11 Years Ago
Ah, yes, yes.. and yes! Of course! So glad to know you're writing more magic.. (:
This is the part of JennyBear I Love when reading!! That first stanza had the making of a predictable form and then you threw me off my mindset, beautifully, with a well-crafted play on the words, mixing it up the way you did. : ) I Love it. Going from the first one to the next stanza? ....road trip!! lol Can I go, too? That was fun. : ) When you ran out of "ink", it felt like we were in the mood for dinner out and only found enough money for McDonald's drive-thru!! The third stanza nailed your quick and sharp piece that may seem at other times as a "general" topic.... writer's block, I'm assuming, but you have written about something that I could NOT do...... so you get a straight up "daps" and a hug for pulling it off, JennyBear!! I DO think the first two commas in the third stanza should be semi-colons, though. It takes the place of "nor, and, and yet". Very cool. Looking to my left on your page, right now, I see you have purple hair. ; ) I'm thirsty AND inspired!! Beautiful JennyBear.......... xoxo -Your Mark
*Huge Hugzz for JennyBear!!*
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Oh my :') I love your comments sir :D you've made me really want a mcdonalds... take me? :p and yes,.. read moreOh my :') I love your comments sir :D you've made me really want a mcdonalds... take me? :p and yes, my purple and red hair ^_^ s'great dude, thank you for the review, you know how much I like them :3
Yours ever so faithfully (and huge hugs back to you), JennyBear
I'm Jenny, I'm 18, and my mind is made for poetry, it's how I think, it's how I get my feelings out, It's how I'm heard, may not always be good but it's how I feel inside :)
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