My luck may turn..

This is awful,

Nothing goes right,

My heart can no longer work..

It's physically weak.

I wonder why?

My lungs?

They gave up to..

Collapsing at my friends door

I'm slowly falling apart..

My body won't let me sleep,

Nor eat..

Soon to die.

I find out I'm ill..

Genetic blood disorder too.

I don't understand how to make

myself better...

My love no longer loves me.

I cry every night.

Waiting for the day

My luck will turn

And I become the lucky one

For once.

Reviews

[trainwreck]

This was painful to read, in a good way. You've done an excellent job of expressing your pain and desperation. Good job.

[Sofea]

beautiful and very touching :')

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. I like how the poem went from sadness to some hope. Life is many lessons. Most are not good. Sadness will make the good days seem better. I hope your luck will become very good. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Jazique]

How nice it really shows how some people feel sometimes. It feels like life putting you down all the time and nothing good ever happens but, only things. You showed to never give up hope but, to believe that your luck will turn one day for the better. That was truthful, creative, short, and simple. Well done and keep up the great work.

[JustJordan. x3]

If this was written from a reality point of view, I hope things get better. You have to hit rock bottom beofre things turn around and you being the person you are you need to keep you head help high. It is a wonderful write though.

[M.Babu]

Definitely touched me with the honest tone behind the words.
I feel so sad after reading this...Hope things improve (if this was written from reality).

Keep writing:)

~M.Babu~

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A loving piece, well written, a very dramatic wording system, keep up the good work

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Awww...I feel like hugging you now.

[DeadToTheWorld]

this was quite interesting when I was reading it I had no idea what to expect especially after I read about when in this poem she/he collapsed at the friends door...Wonderful piece duely written....great job.