When...

When...

A Poem by FaithfullyJennyBear

It always hurts when

                         You don't know what to do.

It's never fun when

                         The lies constantly attack you.

It's never right when

                         You take something that isn't yours.

Its shouldn't matter when

                         Your precious star.. away it soars.

It's not the same when

                         You speak my words but for someone else.

It's me to blame when

                         I ask why I can't reach your shelf.

It's always my fault when

                         Someone gets hurt.

It's always my fault when

                         My heart breaks...

                  Again.

© 2011 FaithfullyJennyBear


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Before I even read it, I went "Neat! This is done so interestingly."
However, after reading it through, I realized neat was not a word I should use to describe this. It was emotional, true, raw. This feels like it came from within and I feel lucky that I was able to read it.
Bravo Jenny. :]

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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love the style and format

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a good way of putting things...truly immaculate in the words and the way you put the lines in a zig-zag...truly wonderful...great job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


i love the setup and lay out of the poem very creative..

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a wonderful poem and you are very talented

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Before I even read it, I went "Neat! This is done so interestingly."
However, after reading it through, I realized neat was not a word I should use to describe this. It was emotional, true, raw. This feels like it came from within and I feel lucky that I was able to read it.
Bravo Jenny. :]

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the writing format you've chosen for this piece. :) It makes it easier to read, and when I began reading, I wasn't expecting it to rhyme, but when I did, I was pleasently surprised :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is so amazing, it's full of so much emotion and is written really well.

Posted 13 Years Ago


An excellent piece... well done :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simple and evocative, plain emotion with fierce imagery, well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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FaithfullyJennyBear
FaithfullyJennyBear

England, North east , United Kingdom



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I'm Jenny, I'm 18, and my mind is made for poetry, it's how I think, it's how I get my feelings out, It's how I'm heard, may not always be good but it's how I feel inside :) I've also had every colou.. more..

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