When...

It always hurts when

                         You don't know what to do.

It's never fun when

                         The lies constantly attack you.

It's never right when

                         You take something that isn't yours.

Its shouldn't matter when

                         Your precious star.. away it soars.

It's not the same when

                         You speak my words but for someone else.

It's me to blame when

                         I ask why I can't reach your shelf.

It's always my fault when

                         Someone gets hurt.

It's always my fault when

                         My heart breaks...

                  Again.

Reviews

[Chris]

Before I even read it, I went "Neat! This is done so interestingly."
However, after reading it through, I realized neat was not a word I should use to describe this. It was emotional, true, raw. This feels like it came from within and I feel lucky that I was able to read it.
Bravo Jenny. :]

[Matthew vonHone]

Quite the powerful message.

[Jazique]

Nice work. Creative, emotional, repitions, and in common with many people. Well done. I barely have any words to describe how good this is. I am speechless to hear you express. Fill in the blank to good "When" really was_____________.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Strong emotions my friend.

[Linear]

Nice poetic expressions.......Though things happen, we are seldom the soul cause, we should have no shame and never take all the blame

[Katub]

Omfg love this!! Have booked marked it to my computer so I can read it again

[Coyote Poetry]

Always two side to every story. I like how you set the poem up. Easy to take blame for things when they go wrong. I believe pain and disappointment is just education for us to appreciate the good days when they come. Last lines are sort of true. But old wise saying. "Take no chances. Know no pleasure or fun." A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sophie Titch]

i love that you rhyme XD
and the layout of this poem is so clever!
well done! :)

[trainwreck]

This was painful to read, in a good way. I was impressed by your use of words, and repetition that changes. Good write.

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

great write once again! (: love reading your work

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

"It's never fun when
The lies constantly attack you.
It's never right when
You take something that isn't yours."

Loved this stanza. I could really relate to this poem. The style and format is wonderful, like what AngelinDisguise said. I really enjoyed reading this. Wonderful write. You are a very talented poet!