My love

I say goodbye, As it were our last,

I dread the thought of leaving.

I miss you more with every breath,

I crave the love I'm recieving.

 

When I look into your dark brown eyes,

All I see is the care.

The times without you, I really despise,

I constantly wish you were there.

 

My heart cries for you, When you walk away,

I need you in my arms forever.

Because in my heart you will always stay,

Because my love for you will end never.

 

So bye-bye gorgeous, goodnight my sweet,

I miss you untill the day.

My heart recieves your warm embrace,

You're never getting away.

Reviews

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

I like that you said dark brown eyes. You barely see that in romantic poetry. It's always "big blue eyes" :-P

[LoopyLoo]

This is very good :-) Tres Bien :-)

[lostforever.neverfound]

I can see this is a lovely poem from a warm heart (: thanks for sharing!

[Matthew vonHone]

All-together it's a nice poem. I will assume for the sake of discussion that the speaker is young simply because this is a wonderful example of how love feels at a young age. Captured and interpreted with care, well done.

[Jazique]

Awe so sweet. You did a lovely job. Enjoyed the ending to have that the last few words to hear as to always be there even when you sleep and awake the next day.
"So bye-bye gorgeous, goodnight my sweet,
I miss you untill the day.
My heart recieves your warm embrace,
You're never getting away. "
Well done.

[Mbali]

This is lovely

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this sweet poem of love and desire. You weaved a good story with a very strong ending. I like the complete poem. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Saying goodbye with sad reflection.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very romantic

[Forest Green]

Love intrinsically define...sublime.

Steel