Strangled Heart

Alcoholic who can't feel. Anytime emotion comes he takes a drink.

Another night at the bar,

He sips his drink,

Cutting off all air,

Not letting his heart breathe,

Author's Note

Tell me what the message you get is.

Reviews

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

i bet you could make this a haiku if you tried hard enough. I don't necessarily know what the message is exactly, but I do get the feeling of stifling the pain of heartbreak with alcohol and cutting off the oxygen to that part which feels it hardest. It is like curing a cancer by denying that part of the body any sustenance. It makes a lot of sense to me. Well titled too.

[Faithfuldream]

Thank you. I think this came from a place of feeling, understanding, and experience. Most have not gone through what i have and therefore don't connect it to the feeling i had. I think i did not connect or explain that feeling well enough.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Well, I think you don't want to paint yourself into a corner by not expecting anyone to understand. The most satisfying thing is opening up well enough that anyone can understand even the most difficult emotions. You should provide more buoys and lighthouses to guide us in. I'm not being critical particularly, since this is the hardest thing to do in art -in my opinion. I can only comment on what you are saying though, that it doesn't seem clear enough.

[Dy]

The message I get from this piece is a man not letting himself live.

[Faithfuldream]

Yes. Our struggles are our greatest gifts. They cause us to think, and teach us how to handle adversities. When one drinks away instead of thinking, He loses that gift.....

[Dy]

He also loses himself along the way. Just as a fear to live can.

[Dy]

^*can cause*