Falling

Ring around the rosy

Pocket full of posies

Ashes
Ashes

We all fall

Down, spinning, dizzy,

disconnected.

Falling into the deep unknown,

the mysterious depths of whcih no man survives

the darkest of the night-

 

Always

it is always night here

everything always encased in fear.

Fear of the beasts, waiting in the shadows

their low growls and snickers echo through the silence-

 

Forever

never a single sound

not a whisper in the wind,

not a breath to be heard nor found.

For if there is silence there is shelter

shelter from the sound of your own tears-

 

Drowning

swallowed in despair

enveloped in our worries

choking from tears.

The lake waters rise

sweet and salty drops

falling through its depths...

falling...

 

Ring around the rosie

Pocket full of posies

Ashes,

Ashes,

We all fall

Down

into the waters

forgetting how to swim

our own tears,

our own fears,

taking over in the end

and we always knew this would happen,

always knew its plan,

knew that the beast would always come out

as the victors of our sins.

 

Falling

forever now, endless,

into the deepest pit of despair,

fill to the brim with our choked out tears.

Reviews

[ShaneBerry]

the words "Always" "forever" and "Drowning" made this poem pop! they seemed like little thumps in the nose. i love when someone takes an innocent schoolyard rhyme and turns it into a darker, or more meaning full poem of in some cases sonnet lol. great write Ghost. i look forward to seeing more from you on here lol.

[Abigail]

This is really good Elisa!!! NICE JOB!!

[Shiningwolf]

sooo deep...it's creative. I like how you incorporated that old song in with your poem.

[Cynthia]

W-O-W. It's really deep, how am I suppose to talk about it? Its just... too deep, in a good way, readers do understand, but I'm wordless. If this word can explain the shock and deepness of your poem will be ' wordless'.

[Midday_Mystery]

Wow!!!!! Just WOW, its hard to review something like this because it is super deep. You have spiraled me on a roller coaster and made me dizzy with all kinds of profound thought! Great Job!

[GimmeFriedChiken]

Damn this is deep Elisa! It's really good this blew me away! 99/100 I didn't give you the whole 100 out of sheer jealousy hehe. Keep it up your amazing and don't let no one tell you otherwise!