So is the Girl With the Broken Soul

Deep the night when the stars don’t shine

Bright the light when it comes the time

Forever pity in two lovers quarrel

Light the laugh of a small young girl

Dark the heart the conman stole-

So is the girl with the broken soul

 

End your day with a crooked smile

Say that you’re fine while all the while

Shattered inside, where it all comes together

Smashed to bits, what really matters

Dropping pennies to pay the toll-

So is the girl with the broken soul

 

What to do, what to wear

Pressure, pressure, hard to bear

Can’t stand up, just sit down

It will pay off when it all comes around

Watching a foreign, old-time show

So is the girl with the broken soul

 

Let shine the light only you possess

And on it will glow through deep distress

Hold it high, proudly above your head

And bring back to life those thought to be dead

Believing that you must relinquish control,

So is the girl with the broken soul

 

Time to come, and drop the shield

Time to let fall the weapons you wield

There is no protection, no defense

Nothing you can do, no hopes no wish,

Realizing that you can never reach your goal,

So is the girl with the broken soul

Author's Note

what do you thiNK? honest to god?

Reviews

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Wow First of all I love the way you placed the So is the... At the end of each Stanza, the rhyme and flow, are always good, and I like your non rhythmatic rhymes, they brought more character to the piece..... My Favoite line of all is:

Time to come, and drop the shield

Time to let fall the weapons you wield

There is no protection, no defense

Nothing you can do, no hopes no wish,

Realizing that you can never reach your goal,

So is the girl with the broken soul



definately going to the favorites if i coul give a 1000/100 i would

[Just Brooke]

I think you are a freaking amazing poet!!!!! This is the second piece by you that I have read and I'm even more blown away than I was when I finished reading the first. this is an amazing piece. You have a gift my friend! You choose your words carefully and you put them together so well. It is truly inspiring to me.

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

This poem is packed full of emotion and intense imagery. Your use of imagery and wording is something to admire. There is so much in this poem to make the reader think, feel and relate to. You write beautifully. I can't think of anything bad to say about it as it was a delight to all the senses and feelings.

[prim]

wow...story of my life
this was really deep and VERY well-written, and i enjoyed it immensely.
keep up the good work!

[Miss Sally Sunshine]

I love! It is extremley relatable! I loved it! It flowed great, and the you have a lot of great lines in there! I don't have a favorite stanza.... because I love them all!

[Awkward]

I loved it mainlybecause it as relatable, well I would have to put boy in there but still you get my poing! (:

[anonymous.]

wow i love it!

[Yuma]

I love this poem. I can't describe in words why but I do.

"What to do, what to wear
Pressure, pressure, hard to bear
Can't stand up, just sit down
It will pay off when it all comes around"

Sounds like peer pressure to me, which I can really relate to some people I know (and probably even myself).

[Glenn]

Walls built around ones heart, and the attempt to break them down, I love the repetition in this piece, it really ties it together.