This was absolutely amazing. The use of physical hurt itself seemed to stand either for just that or emotional hurt and betrayal. I also loved the lightning being a symbol for new hope, new light--until he came back and it portrayed a menacing mood. Great job.
Hard thing to fall into bad place with no escape.
"As lightning strikes,
I’m awoken from my sleep,
My whole body aches,
As the pattern of each day…"
Old Grandma told my sister. Man must sleep. Abuse me and you won't wake-up. A sad write with a honest ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
tting truth for so many people..both male and female, although predoninantly female. such a hard thing to escape, ''i can change them''..''they won't do it again''...''i deserved it''...yea..yea..we all heard them all and will continue to do so sadly. you have summed up the domestically violent relationship perfectly. i hope that isn't because of personal experience as it seems so prevalent in todays world. it is very well written and structured. well done you on summing up, so well, the destructiveness of this topic. full marks.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you so much :)
This was not a personal experience, but I was well aware that this is co.. read moreThank you so much :)
This was not a personal experience, but I was well aware that this is common and really wanted to capture the truth of this problem
you have done an amazing job..so much so i thouhgt maybe you had experienced it, gkad you haven't! e.. read moreyou have done an amazing job..so much so i thouhgt maybe you had experienced it, gkad you haven't! excellent job, i have experienced it and you have really caught it how it is, the thought pattern etc, well done you
8 Years Ago
I'm sorry that you had to experience something like that. Nobody deserves to be put through it. I ho.. read moreI'm sorry that you had to experience something like that. Nobody deserves to be put through it. I hope that you aren't anymore, and you're safe now.
8 Years Ago
yes, it was a long time ago but it goes to show how good your writing skills are :)
I enjoy writing non fiction, and a lot of poems that actually mean something. I hope that when people read my poems that they feel something. I also write songs from time to time.
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