Eye Of The Storm

Like a book without any pages,

and a bird without it’s wings.

Like the sea without a raging current,

You never made sense to me.

Now tell me where did you go?

Why did you leave?

To the darkness I’ve succumb,

It’s all around me.

Deafening silence,

In the calm of the sea,

There’s nowhere to run,

when I don’t know who to be.

But I’ll write a book,

Over a thousand pages.

And with new wings,

I’ll fly like the raven.

The wind picked up,

I’m stuck in the current,

In the eye of the storm,

I’m breaking the rules.

Silent screams filling the air,

Getting harder to breath,

Can’t quite remember what you meant to me.

All I know is that I’m,

Trying now,

Harder than before,

Got to take a chance,

Gotta break down this door.

Deafening silence,

In the calm of the sea.

There’s nowhere to run,

when I don’t know who to be.

But I’ll write a book,

Over a thousand pages.

And with new wings,

I’ll fly like the raven.

The wind picked up,

I’m stuck in the current.

In the eye of the storm,

I’m breaking the rules.

I’m made of flaws,

Stitched together with good intentions,

Maybe not who you want me to be,

but I have my own protention,

So leave me alone,

in the eye of the storm,

and the now comforting silence.

I’ll write a book,

Over a thousand pages.

And with new wings,

I’ll fly like the raven.

The wind picked up,

I’m stuck in the current,

In the eye of the storm,

I’m breaking the rules.

And in the eye of the storm,

I’ll break all the rules ,

I'll break all the rules,

Yeah I’ve broken the rules.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

"Like the sea without a raging current"
Sounds fine but is weak on logic. Calm seas are not confusing. It makes superficial sense in the poem but it just kind of bugs me. Still waters make sense. Eh, I guess I wouldn't change it, I'm being to literal right now.

"In the eye of the storm..."
that whole arc is excellent.

You end it weak though... "...Yeah I've broken the rules". You can do better than that. An anticlimactic ending doesn't help here.

[Pete]

This is very good. Very inspirational. Takes me on a nice journey. Like how it turns around at the end. Well done.