When a man loves a woman

The evolution of love

When a man loves a woman

There is no path to follow, when a man loves a woman, time does not exist, there are no arguments, the others do not exist, the lover is not aware of himself. there is only a sublime peace surrounding the lovers.

But then, when you are installed in heaven, your mind begins to think. Thinking is the enemy of feeling, because it means measuring. Thinking and measuring are the same reality. When space is invedade by thinking, there is no room for love.

Finally, it bursts the war between our soul and our mind. And heaven dissapears.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your wording reads a little clumsy, but your message is spot on & very relatable. This is true whether man loving woman or any other relationship. When we come together in a heartfelt way, it's all good. But when our thinking takes hold of the situation, that's when we start measuring & judging, a sure death knell to loving kindness. It would be good to also SHOW this instead of telling. For example, describing a scenario when this happens between two people.

[Francisco]

Thank you so much for your comments. That is very kind of you.

[Inject Positivity]

Wow!! Francisco, I think your concept is very thought provoking... very wise observation about how thinking can damage a relationship which began with true heavenly love... Over thinking is the slow murder of love in a relationship... Very well done with this...

By the way do you think you can turn it into a poem? I believe you can, the story reads very well poetically...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Francisco]

Thank you very much Dhiman. I am glad you like it. I have no experience as a writer. So your comments are so important to me. I'd like to turn the piece into a poem, but I think I couldn't. I will try to push myself to compose a poem. Thank you so much.

[Shannon]

Fransisco, it seems significant improvements have been made to this since I last saw it. Have you considered reframing it as a poem? You have all the elements already, I think.