Penitent

Thank you Richard for your support and suggestions on my sonnets ... :)

P E N I T E N T

The chains, long forged, from dark, persistent paths

of blackened rock that smothers golden fields …

Akin to dragon's caldron swirling wraths

red scallion plates so thickly plied to shield.

Youth's steady stream of brazen, hot desires

as sunset looms on spent horizon's line

to steady reins of stallion's pulsing fires;

thus, rising bright, a new celestial sign …

Releasing now, imprisoned for so long,

the true and lasting Heaven's ringing call

in ageless joy of spirits sung in Psalms …

if one but trusts the Star of David's laud.

A rose forgiven each it's hoary thorns;

and thus made perfect, halos now adorn.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Your poetic ability leaves me speechless and this poem is deserving of some type of front page award. The couplet speaks volumes and the sonnet itself trumpeting halos, as rewards for the sinful mistakes of our youth, forces the reader to realize we will all eventually return to our heavenly Father for the final judgment. Great sonnet and one to be savored, as a fine wine. Thanks for posting. :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhh thank you so very much, Tamara .. i am deeply gratified and humbled by your review .. you heard all that i intended in the poem .. bless you and thank you again for taking time
E.

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

You're welcome. I won't be posting for a while, so thought I'd add a reply to your poem. Have a wonderful holiday. :-)

[Neville]

I can only imagine the feeling of sheer relief one might experience upon satisfactorily relieving oneself of the heavy burden his or her collective sins weighed upon a conscience desperate for absolution .. fortunately my conscience is clear .. but I do believe that guilt is the most destructive of all human emotions with jealousy coming a close second .. I also believe that to feel the kind of catharsis I refer to, one must first truly own their individual grief or sorrow for their own misdoings .. I was kidding by the way when I suggested I am guilty of nothing .. but then, you knew that already, didn't you Gene .. Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

there are plenty of human emotion and thought that are plagues upon their victims .. false guilt is certainly a huge one ... greed and avarice ... envy and jealousy .. hate and violence ... all devils in disguise, says i .. i think you hit the wisdom button when you say we all must first come to terms with "self" ... brutal honesty neccessary .. love your review, Sir ... i am very grateful for your interacting with my poem and thoughts .. love love love :)
E.

[Neville]

they are of course what make us distinctly human .. & back at ya E :))) N.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ... born in need ..........

[Stella Armour]

" a new celestial sign …"
As we age we think more deeply and discover ourselves more deeply, it is one of the last steps to full maturity i think.
The mis-spent youth was only us testing the boundaries, then we made the boundaries and now we dont need them because we are so self contained that we are at one with the universe and will return home after going full circle..... Just my thoughts E about penitence and self discovery and forgiving ourselves for what was only enjoying the seeds of life breaking free.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my dear Stella! .. yep! .. all i can say is yep and yes to your review .. i think you feel me dahlink! so ironic; the energy of youth wasted on the material world .. worry ... insecurities and such blustering bumblings :))))))))))) we are fortunate to be were we are tho eh!? love on ya .. and thanks for taking time on my little streets .. right here at the Cafe'
E.

[Stella Armour]

I enjoy it when poems make me THINK, so thank you for the mind exercise E ..... :)

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
I know, I know... where have I been...well, life just took over and my days have been full...
You are the first I am reading here after such a very long break.
Now this is so very different from all the others I have read of yours in the past.
I have now and enjoyed the read three times...
The music is wonderful... Reminds me of my years singing in a coral group...
Lisa...Lisasview

[Einstein Noodle]

i guess we two are resurrected about the same time, Lisa! I also have been laid low with the whims of creative spark .. i turn to classic forms when my dry spell expands too long ... thank you for stopping on my street first of all .. i really feel honored .. humbled ... plus .. you read it three times ... so grateful .. love, joy and abundance my friend and a very blessed celebration of Christmas .. my Lord's birth
E.

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Glad to reconnect... but now I will be away from the computer as I am going to have a knee replacement on Jan.3
Years of running caught up with me!!
Lisa

[Einstein Noodle]

time and gravity kills the knees for sure .. keeping you in my thoughts and prayers for successful surgery and complete, speedy recovery ..

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh my....you had a wild youth and now you are repenting as the years have added up. You have accepted your religion and you are dedicated to all its principles. What a heavy introspective sonnet this is, E. Just a question. Isn't the word in the title "Penitent"? Not sure if it is spelled differently for religious purposes. Anyway, a powerful write and a splendid sonnet. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! the title is as spelled and means sorrow for wrongs done .. the religious connection is only what penitence requires .. ;) yes .. this is reflective of my life; but hopefully has broader implications .. love you sister! thanks for reviewing .. always
E.