Such a darkness to this piece. Yet so relatable for now...Bullets to the heads....People take bullets to their heads as calmly as we would take a hat to our heads! No patience, no endurance, no fortitude. They say a lot and then there is silence. Their screams drown unheard. The shattered casing of their heads, their 15 minutes of fame. A Poem from you after so long, dear E and certainly one to remember and return for re-reads. Loved it and the lovely artwork too! ❤🙋♀️❤
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you have made my day, Divya! i couldn't imagine more from a review .. thank you for all your support.. read moreyou have made my day, Divya! i couldn't imagine more from a review .. thank you for all your support, right here at the Cafe' ;)
E.
1 Year Ago
ps. i love how you expanded on the bullets to the head ... you inspire me
1 Year Ago
Then I'll expect more of such poetry from you, dear E. Sorry for the delayed response as I've had a .. read moreThen I'll expect more of such poetry from you, dear E. Sorry for the delayed response as I've had a bad couple of days from a cold.
Its always wonderful to read and reconnect with you, dear friend! ❤
1 Year Ago
back at ya .. so happy you are feeling better. we had an unusual wind and snow storm that knocked po.. read moreback at ya .. so happy you are feeling better. we had an unusual wind and snow storm that knocked power out of most of N. Central AR. .. mine was restored yesterday .. after 4 days ... so grateful for propane, generators and fireplaces! ;) thank you for all your encouragement .. i take it seriously as a challenge to stop being so lazy. i will say, in my favor, ;) i am working on a sonnet .. but those take me forever to complete .. i need the 3V and closing lines .. and then to make sure it is true to the form .. very foreign territory for me but also very satisfying if successful .. i turn to forms when my creativity wanes to nothing .. luv and hugs on ya dear one
I wish you all the best for the sonnet, dear friend. If you love the process of creating one then le.. read moreI wish you all the best for the sonnet, dear friend. If you love the process of creating one then let it take forever. I love my journeys with writing more than the destinations I reach with my words. So may you have much joy and bliss-filled days with poetry and of course in the blessed warmth and light of the fireplace and the generators! :)
Wow! dear Gene... I feel your frustration and sadness, this can be both, real violence and psychological one, i.e real bullets that kill and words that kill too! the way your poem flows scatteringly is perfect and smart, because from nowhere these bullets hit us. may You only find peace in your heart and mind my wonderful friend~
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thank you for your generosity .. you are truly a joyful blessing around here .. i know lots of peopl.. read morethank you for your generosity .. you are truly a joyful blessing around here .. i know lots of people appreciate your work and your encouragement .. i know i do .. i am much at peace these days ... mostly i try not to try ;)))))))
E.
I shudder at the shatters and then I close my shutters cause there's so little of me left to shatter anymore:( but then I flutter and I have to go out and pick up the tatters and have to weave them back together... because they matter:) This made me think of Tyre Nichols
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your alliterations tickle me ear sir .. i have not been following the Tyre Nichols beating and death.. read moreyour alliterations tickle me ear sir .. i have not been following the Tyre Nichols beating and death much .. but truly a terrible expression of what is dark in our society today ... i am reading a book about "Holy Moments" and how we can choose to make them happen ... simply choosing Holy rather than unholy ..the author goes on to talk about the ripple effect such behavioral choices can change the world ... i tend to believe in such things .. what happened to Tyre is ugly, vicious and despicable ... i am sure justice will be served in this case ... the evidence is pretty clear :( thanks for taking a peak at this one my friend .. best of the day to ya
E.
A broken world for sure. I grew up on the south side of Chicago. It is a war zone. "Shattered scatterings" brings to mind the homeless, the mental illness and addictions.
When did we forget WE are our brother's keeper... Broken Pieces (to me) reflects that pain.
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those that will .. do what we can eh!? you were on rough shores in Chicago .. and look at the art yo.. read morethose that will .. do what we can eh!? you were on rough shores in Chicago .. and look at the art your mind, heart and souls creates in poetry .. I'm tellin' ya! your stuff are things of beauty! thanks for stopping by to read and comment .. we keep each other going here don't we?! right here at the Cafe'
E.
i think so .. any town .. any where .. we can be shattered on our own stoop ... :( thanks, John! for.. read morei think so .. any town .. any where .. we can be shattered on our own stoop ... :( thanks, John! for visiting and commenting .. means a lot to me!
E.
Outstanding E.N. I get the sense not only of mass shooters but of mass despondency. A question: Here in Oklahoma noodling is fishing for catfish by jumping into the water and coaxing 60 pound fish to chomp down on your hands.
The question? Is there a better way, an Einstein Noodling you might say?
Winston
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you hit the proverbial nail head in this one Mr. W. .. a horrid despondency and lack of awareness as.. read moreyou hit the proverbial nail head in this one Mr. W. .. a horrid despondency and lack of awareness as we walk over pieces spread out on and and every walk of life .. mass shooting always a spot light on something very wrong in us as human beings .. i know what noodling is sir; but have never tried it .. cat fishing in such a way must bring a noodler back to stone age roots .. as far as the other .. there is most certainly a better way .. "knock and the door shall be opened, seek and ye shall find" in the immortal words of Jesus Christ .. one first has to recognize the darkness itself .. and our need for God's light and life ;) luv on ya brother .. with peace and joy! thanks so much for your comments and taking time to read and share
E.
Your artwork Mr E is stunning in this spontaneous write which has a real darkness about it. Broken artwork, broken people and my mind transports to over thirty mass shootings which have taken place so far in the States this year. I am left horrified at the number of deaths and the knock on effect on so many family and friends of those who died as a result of maniacs who want their 15 minutes of fame. Taking out as many as they can. The line
We can smell them and see them in pieces
and singed hair
that line is particularly gruesome for me. We have problems with knives but you can kill far faster and far more with guns. A horrible start to a new year. Your pen tells it as it is.
yes .. it is true about the mass shootings .. and you haven't even touched on the deaths r/t gangs a.. read moreyes .. it is true about the mass shootings .. and you haven't even touched on the deaths r/t gangs and drugs every day in our streets here .. there are shatterings everywhere on many levels aren't there, Chris .. all as tragic as the next .. the sacredness of one's own life seems trampled under a barrage of falsities that tempt us into that very dark place .. you bless me with your review on this one and all those you have read of mine ... i love your stuff girl! ... thank you for pointing to that line ... it is an important one for me .. knives, rocks, fists, clubs, cars and trucks, bombs and guns .. we do it all don't we :((((((((((((((((((((
big luv and life on ya Chris! :)
E.
1 Year Ago
Thank you my friend. There is much to be sad about but still there are the gems that make life worth.. read moreThank you my friend. There is much to be sad about but still there are the gems that make life worth living. Have a good weekend. 🌸
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yes there are ... even with all what is written .. the hope and the beauty of God's creation is imme.. read moreyes there are ... even with all what is written .. the hope and the beauty of God's creation is immense .. beyond our p-brains and so gorgeous!
It's sad to read this after hearing of a shooting that left 10 dead last night. There are too many broken pieces in our world. Too many shattered lives, some with hidden pain that will never fully be revealed.
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you feel me to the bone in this one, Relic .. so grateful for your time and review .. seems we are a.. read moreyou feel me to the bone in this one, Relic .. so grateful for your time and review .. seems we are all broken and in need of mending :(
E.
Life sometimes only shows us its dark side. Some blisters never heal....and the screaming echoes in our souls at dark thirty. Great metaphor with the leaves. A very well written poem, E. I like it.
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it sure does, doesn't it, Lydi!? Yes! the dark thirty .. you git the proverbial nail's head luv! tha.. read moreit sure does, doesn't it, Lydi!? Yes! the dark thirty .. you git the proverbial nail's head luv! thank you for pointing out a line that particularly spoke to you .. it helps a lot .. love and peace and joy my dear friend!
E.
Such a darkness to this piece. Yet so relatable for now...Bullets to the heads....People take bullets to their heads as calmly as we would take a hat to our heads! No patience, no endurance, no fortitude. They say a lot and then there is silence. Their screams drown unheard. The shattered casing of their heads, their 15 minutes of fame. A Poem from you after so long, dear E and certainly one to remember and return for re-reads. Loved it and the lovely artwork too! ❤🙋♀️❤
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1 Year Ago
you have made my day, Divya! i couldn't imagine more from a review .. thank you for all your support.. read moreyou have made my day, Divya! i couldn't imagine more from a review .. thank you for all your support, right here at the Cafe' ;)
E.
1 Year Ago
ps. i love how you expanded on the bullets to the head ... you inspire me
1 Year Ago
Then I'll expect more of such poetry from you, dear E. Sorry for the delayed response as I've had a .. read moreThen I'll expect more of such poetry from you, dear E. Sorry for the delayed response as I've had a bad couple of days from a cold.
Its always wonderful to read and reconnect with you, dear friend! ❤
1 Year Ago
back at ya .. so happy you are feeling better. we had an unusual wind and snow storm that knocked po.. read moreback at ya .. so happy you are feeling better. we had an unusual wind and snow storm that knocked power out of most of N. Central AR. .. mine was restored yesterday .. after 4 days ... so grateful for propane, generators and fireplaces! ;) thank you for all your encouragement .. i take it seriously as a challenge to stop being so lazy. i will say, in my favor, ;) i am working on a sonnet .. but those take me forever to complete .. i need the 3V and closing lines .. and then to make sure it is true to the form .. very foreign territory for me but also very satisfying if successful .. i turn to forms when my creativity wanes to nothing .. luv and hugs on ya dear one
I wish you all the best for the sonnet, dear friend. If you love the process of creating one then le.. read moreI wish you all the best for the sonnet, dear friend. If you love the process of creating one then let it take forever. I love my journeys with writing more than the destinations I reach with my words. So may you have much joy and bliss-filled days with poetry and of course in the blessed warmth and light of the fireplace and the generators! :)
Very emotive and wonderful structure. Life eh? This contains all the hallmarks I've come to expect from you my friend.
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thank you for your continued encouragement Ken .. we are old friends aren't we!? i'm glad you felt t.. read morethank you for your continued encouragement Ken .. we are old friends aren't we!? i'm glad you felt this one ... not surprised you can relate .. luv on ya brother .. peace and joy and a warm fire
E.
This morning as I began to log in to WC, it occurred to me what an inspiring and comfortable place this has become for me.
There are so many talented people sharing, encouraging, teaching and learni.. more..