Hair

Hair

her hair is water falling

Shining black deeps 

tumbling down her back

she tossed her head and laughed 

pointing out her split          ends 

brushing aside my intent

I thought .............. of

fireworks and 

sparklers 

as sunlight hits water on rapid rocks.

The soft edge of her pale palm brushed

against hot, bacon greased pan; 

                       

                         and

singed a distinct brand      -       the

size and shape of a small caterpillar

right there

just     so

She misjudged time and

tender fingers nicked the oven rack and

ever so slightly ..... 

a cooling ... and deceiving 

open oven's door

sizzling burn             instant blister

and hurt gone unscathed

how can such a beauty be?

E.

12/03/2022

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lorry]

How can such a beauty be indeed Sir E. A perfect contradiction of perfection and what others would mark down as negatives, but only someone who truly sees beauty can notice split ends and oven burns and still see perfection.
I hide my split ends behind a beanie these days and barely bare my skin in these sub Arctic days... Which is just as well as dating here involves so many layers it more resembles a game of pass the parcel than anything that could even be called lukewarm action.
As ever, always a pleasure to play random roulette on your page, where I have an uncanny ability to hit jackpot most times.

[Einstein Noodle]

you are too kind dear friend .. thank you so much .. feels good you enjoyed meeting Ms. Perfect imperfected ... thanks so much for this reveiw .. love and joy Lorry!
E.

[Neville]

Sheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeshh how on earth did I miss this until now? Surely one of your finest to date Gene .. there, now having said that .. I am conscious that I have said the same thing before .. I am somewhat lost for words ..but secure in the knowing, that as a cherished poet & friend, you really are getting more and more adept at this game .. a truly outstanding & inspiring bit of poetry brother E.

N.

[Einstein Noodle]

i am humbled and touched by your words Neville .. you know .. we write and we WRITE and then mess every thing up in spades ... we can think one thing or another about our own stuff but a review like yours on this poem is an blessing indeed .. love and joy sir! thank you so much!!
E.

[Pete]

love the ending. passion whilst keeping it real. this touches the heart as well as the mind's eye. there's a lot cookin' here - tender ... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Pete .. for taking time and reading with sensitivity .. means a lot sir!
E.

[Soren]

Distraction by what ever means can lead to painful experiences. As I started I wasn't sure where I was going but I guess I was distracted as well. Nice job.

[Einstein Noodle]

;))))))))))))))))))))) thank you for reading and your review Soren! you bless me truly!
E.

[lightsong]

First and before anything else, being with the darkest hair I am extremely thankful for You, generally we see many poems about the beauty of blondies. second, this must be one of your finest poems... majestic, mysterious, deep, sensual, passionate... yet sentimental and tender. this kind of composition what makes the beauty of this poem outstanding. and someone who is able to taste such beauty and expressed it in that way, is surely someone whose inner is beautiful and know the worth of true beauty. a superior stellar gem...

[Einstein Noodle]

i am blushing dahlink! thank you so much for your appreciation, reading and enjoying .. and most of all letting me know your thoughts on it .. she is a rare beauty who graced my presence briefly .. its a story that, i think, will remain it's own mystery ;) love love love on ya!
E.

[lightsong]

:> what You say here makes the poem even more special.

Happy Bright Morning from here and LOVE YA TOO 🤍

[Einstein Noodle]

;) ........................

[Betty Hermelee]

This is a very tender poem, with vivid colors and abstract images; even with a burn from the oven this beauty goes unscathed…. And to you, a chemistry. That fits the desire you crave…..
Soft and intimate…
Best, B.

[Einstein Noodle]

i love your review .. it is lilting and musical itself .. thanks so much for blessing me with your time and thoughts on this one .. as always
E.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome, so glad you’re back!!
Best, B

[Ciara]

This seems like just another day and it's like taking a black and white page out of life and adding in the colours that amplify the senses.

[Einstein Noodle]

how aptly put my new found friend! i am abstract .. and that's just how it is for sure .. you do the filling and i am deeply gratified and honored ;)
E.

[Ciara]

:) my pleasure

[Kelly Scheppers]

I couldn't help but focus on the burns...a grease burn is a b***h. But you know, I really like this. A few people have mentioned how it's a bit out of your wheelhouse, but that's a good thing! And you're a good thing, too!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes ... those burns are a b***h and only take the smallest part of an instant to cut to the core .. the constrast might be a bit of a stretch .. but .. you know my friend .. I yam what i yam! ;) love your visit and so thankful for your taking time and sharing thoughts on this one .. as always
E.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...always my pleasure!

[Temperance]

sizzling burn instant blister and hurt gone unscathed ........ such a dichotomy. It would be wonderful if hurt did go unscathed. What a better and happier life it would be for everyone. This poem is softer than your usual write and I really like it. Glad to see the muse is working your noodle again. Temp

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much dear friend ... and so grateful for your visit and review .. yes .. big dichotomy .. thank you for feeling that .. not sure going unscathed is something to wish for tho .. we are human .. ;) luv on ya! really happy to be back at the Cafe' ... and thanks for reviewing!
E.

[Dennis Wolf]

The image and the writing are connected, just not in the obvious way.

I kind of like that.
Now, haven't read much in your style before and it's been a while since the last one... And so my de-coding module is dusty hahaha

I'm guessing you were writing about desires, particularly for another person or perhaps... Just the remnants of desires for multiple people down the line.

It does seem centered on one person but then, there's always more to it hehe.


Another idea might be just that feeling... You know, that emotional high you get as a teen when you see your biggest crush haha yeah, that's kind of desire but that high doesn't actually disappear... Just matures a bit over time, and even after 'adulthood' when it's no longer that childish craving... It matures again.

Huh... Look at that, I'm dozing off hahaha
Sorry for the long comment.
Cheers

[Einstein Noodle]

long comments accepted with gratitude! no code book to unravel my friend .. just sit back and feel the ride ;)
E.

[Dennis Wolf]

Well I did enjoy it.
:)

[willweb]

Definitely cool, this feels hot but an abstract kind of hot that has people sighing and wishing it were them. I can hear subtle blues tune, sax I think, in the background as this poem sashays across the page. Really cool.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man!.......... thanks so much .. who can object to a blues sax? ;) luv on ya brother and thanks for spending time
E.