Touch

Touch

ebony hair ablaze with shine

in the daylight

a waterfall cascade of starbright

this   patterned index started with

ridges as the Saw toothed Mountains 

that nick smokey clouded heights and

sweeps misted valleys

hollow walls make spaces for souls and 

demons just as easily

our luggage packed haphazard

 ...... willy nilly in 

frenzied, chaotic dancing wisps

stuffed between soft, brown, leather lids

zippered shut

 

private intricacies squeezed between lips 

clicked shutter tight

 .............. pictures that captured and

freyed sayings much over done

the weight loads one shoulder 

then; another beyond balance 

winding about the neck

like cobwebs

                                       hanging            and             dangling

          at odd angles 

touching

E.

02/14/2022

Author's Note

Reviews

[Mike Keenan]

Not sure about the need for first three stanzas, but I do like saw toothed mountains so yes, a ponderous picture of heavy issues sealed in Pandora's boxes. I like the rhythm, form and the way that you typically go for broke as in the golfer's lament - never up; never in!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much for your honesty my new found friend .. not a golfer so haven't heard to phrase ... but i like it ... more brings to mind my present love life tho :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) not to be concerned for me tho .. i am old and past all that nonsense ...not! ;) ... sorry the V1-3 failed to touch you .... but i love your review!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, the weight of memories....they can weigh us down at times. Thing is, we had those moments....we traveled to those places and fit so much in our suitcases! Memories can come at us in a frenzy, that's for sure. Still, I cherish those intricate memories that were very private and between two special people. Your poetry always is thought provoking, E. Well written. Lydi***

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Lydi! you feel me don't you?! ;) yes! our baggage can be a challenge with bitter sweet in the mix ... thank you for pointing out the "frenzy" .. love that! and luv to you my dear friend
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"private intricacies squeezed between lips
clicked shutter tight
.............. pictures that captured and
freyed sayings much over done"

So beautiful & so sad E.... Great dramatic style with lead-in pauses and indented lines, metaphors and similies- images that conveys the burden of love and loss, the memories... Thank you for this profound share. Excellent write and so much more.

[Einstein Noodle]

Annette!.... your review is giving me goose bumps all over me face and head .. i am so humbled by your remarks .. deepest thanks ma'am .. so happy this touched you ;)
E.