Gone Fishing

three senryu

Gone Fishing

Just enough a hook 

to fit the size of hunger.

Pain the daily catch.

I called you today

from remote connecting link.

You dropped off the line.

Changing channels I

heard consuming monologue 

responding ........... white noise.

7/05/2021

Author's Note

Reviews

[h d e rushin]

if you tried to fish the Great Lakes this year you know the frustration. The water level was too high for the inland lakes, streams and rivers. The fish that would otherwise spawn, refused. It rained far too much during the summer months and it was cold far too long into the spring. "Fishing" is a masculine (though noble) pseudonym for being in love. You turned the poems beginning into the "Odyssey" where perplexed-bewilderedness became the Lothphagi of indolence. But it was a love poem after all. And No amount of lotus eating can make forlorn lovers listen.....dana

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha ..no amount of Lotus eating indeed ...dear Dan ..what a delight to have your input .. i think i will frame your review and put it up on the cabin wall somewhere ... you gave me such a chuckle ... Arkansas has been a bit dry overall ... many smaller streams barely flowing; but the larger rivers are always good fishing around here .. i am one that would frustrate dedicated fisher men and women (lots of them here) because my idea is .. cast it out and fahgetabotit ... sit back with a good book and a beer ... it i do happen to catch something ... so much the better! thanks to reading and a delightful review!
E.

[Paul Bell]

Trying to reconnect with the unonnected.
This is like the bitter end and the caller probably knows it, but just one more attempt, just one to try and reconnect. Painful one this one, you sort of hope he succeeds but deep down you know he wont.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep! some broken love's are hard to let go .. though the line snapped a long time ago eh!? ;) thanks so much for visiting and reviewing Paul .. I highly regard your remarks ... peace and luv sir!
E.

[Betty Hermelee]

a clever way of disappointment on the other side, I guess you were trying to call from afar, only white noise or someone else in the background speaking, also the fishing may be a disappointment as well, stabbing one, stabbing two....very well done.
Best, B,

[Einstein Noodle]

thannk you Betty .. you are very kind ... yeah .. disappointments abound in fishing and communication don't they!? ;))
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Do you have room next to you? I would like to do some of this fishing with you.
I see pain jumping like bass on a calm lake.
I quite like these...thematically they all bite the same hook...swimmingly.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha what a great review my friend! you seem to have swallowed them hook line and sinker :))))) luv ya brother! thanks so much for taking time!
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. of course! there is always room for you sir! just bring your own beer! :))))))))))))))

[Chris Shaw]

Three little gems here Mr E. I do find senryus and haikus incredibly addictive. They can capture so much in seventeen syllables. All three linked by the word line.

The first one reminds me of a fisherman I saw a couple of days ago while in Brixham. He caught a beaut in size but then struggled to get the hook out of the poor thing. That poor fish struggled so, I certainly felt some pain watching it, until it was freed and returned to live a other day in the salty water.

The second reminds me again of struggles, only this time with the mobile phone. If you aren't able to get a decent signal, it is so easy to lose the person you are talking to, or worse still fail to connect altogether.


And then your third about white noise, oh yes another frustration. Unable to tune in to the channel to watch that favourite programme. Just picking up all that crackly noise.

Whether metaphorical or taken at face value, these are clever and it is so good to see you lifting that pen of yours. Have a lovely day.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much for taking time Chris .. always appreciate your input! yes! they can be addicting. my mother in law did a haiku a day for a year .. my younger son also accepted that challenge .. me .. i don't think i would last a whole year.. i barely can keep my daily prayers going ;) top o'
the mahrnin to ya lass!
E.

[Chris Shaw]

That is quite a challenge, a haiku every day for a year. You would need to be very disciplined to stick to that aim. A good morning to you Mr E. Afternoon here across the pond. Hope your day is peaceful and productive.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Chris .. i feel you and am blessed!

[Chris Shaw]

Have a good week-end Mr E.

[Neville]

Each one of these little nuggets is enticingly golden & shines blindingly brightly in its very own light and own way sir .. write on and always :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks brother .. i have hit some bumps of life and writing seems a very dense inspiration .. these came from me "new words and phrases" folder .. we all have one right?! .. they almost wrote themselves .. felt good after such a dry spell for me. luv on ya my friend!
E.

[Neville]

.. we do now mate I'm gonna knock up a new folder as soon as I have finished me tea ..

so good to hear Gene & always a pleasure :)

N.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I love all three sunrtus. Both have great metaphorical references.

[Einstein Noodle]

hey Rock and Roller!! what a treat to have you stop by! thank you!! glad you like them :)
E.

[adornoscousin]

I read this poem a few times. I really like it. There is a longing, a questioning to it. There is something left, something waiting. I like it.

[Einstein Noodle]

kind of like fishing eh!? :)))))))))))))))) thank you for stopping to read a-cousin!
E.
read morekind of like fishing eh!? :)))))))))))))))) thank you for stopping to read a-cousin!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

White noise can be just the ticket to lull a person to sleep....or into a creative sort of coma. Not sure I want to catch pain when I go fishing though. Senryu are not easy to write for me. I lose count of the syllables. Seems like you have it down to a science. Good ones here, E. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it can can't it, Lydi!? its the fish that feel the pain ... at least i think they do. ;) thank you always for your generous, encouraging support my dear friend!
E.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Ahhhh you won’t believe it - I’m at the shop buying my wife and kids rods - this evening at low tide we are going fishing on rocks! I hope that I could write something triumphant…..with no grey noise ;) Well written!

[Einstein Noodle]

Sleepless!! my old friend .. so good to see you sticking around again .. right here at the Cafe'' .. isn't that a coincidence?! so did you guys catch any fish!?? for several months the white noise in me nog seems to obliterate any attempts i have had to write .. hope your fishing trip was a break through for you and you all ate a great breakfast of fish!
E.

[lightsong]

well done dear E!! smart one there! that what it feels when a connection between two is broken and a one side is trying to rebuild the bond carefully by dropping the right amount or way of "willing" even change their waves to the waves of the other person, unfortunately though when this person is blocked in heart and mind, we will hear nothing in return for our sincere effort. this what your Senryu speaks to me about.

[Einstein Noodle]

i like your "take" on these Ms. Light! thank you for taking time to read and review. yes .. so very true what you say about connectedness .. it has to be lines open from both ends .. has to cut through the "white noise" .. with faith and steadfast love .. impossible when the "other" drops off the line or stops up their ears ...thanks agian for sharing your thoughts on these .. see ya 'round .. right here at the Cafe' ;)
E.