When I Die

thank you KWP for giving me that last line and word on this one... it is changed from "falling" to "fading" ... it takes a village eh!? ;)

When I die

the lure was educational                                     

                                                        

She wasn't trying to open discussions

So                           I said nothing

She carried the weight 

all the  power in her favor

all the world  .................................................and

the passing are no matter                      at all   

                             really

calm hand       

                       spine tingling fingers        

                                                                 cold  wrapping those

finely tuned strings of spun corruption

 'round and round and 

                                                         around the whole of things                                                               

those                     specific colors and       feathered flavors  

those                     specific species                       in it 

from the beginning and

now the end

fading ...................  

E.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

I was drawn to the title. Oh, how we avoid death at all costs, especially talking about it.
Death in Western countries is just taboo. Actually, I think we would rather say people expired.
I think it is brave to talk about it, maybe make the journey more bearable at the end.
Tough poem this one, a thought for the day.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much Paul .. I think you are absolutely right .. we should talk about it along with every other important subject .. it is as natural as birth eh!? i think its the perceived unknown and expectation of loss as well as our own mortality that makes it difficult. With Faith our goal is reset beyond the grave .. we strive to live for others and do all we can to conform to the wondrous "Golden Rule" .. or we go destructive .. harming ourselves and others to one degree or another. With just that mustard seed of Faith we know well the confidence of 1Corinthians 15:55 "O death, where is thy sting? O grave, where is thy victory?...." it goes on to say that the "sting" is caused by our sin .. our misunderstanding of what is really free and what isn't ... anyway ;) ... i really appreciate your review ... that it gave you pause .. to think and consider is more than i could hope for in a poem ... be well my friend and stay safe ...
E.

[Paul Bell]

I think it's a British thing, death is the person next door, he or she was old, so it was expected. We'll bow our heads and put it to sleep then probably go shopping to forget the experience.

[Einstein Noodle]

not just the Brits ;) ..............................

[Robert Trakofler]

I often wonder if death is ever remorseful in the ending of a shining spirit one that glows and bristles with the joy of life in spite of all the wretched cast upon them. I wonder if death ever has regret in its work? Do you think a poem that perseveres long after its author is like a dagger in death's mandate? LOL well I think it might just be a band-aid for them both brother poet

[Einstein Noodle]

i have never considered it Bad One! She's rather impersonal in this one ... ;) i think your thought on that is another poem ... death so saddened for taking someone ... maybe even puts them back eh!? :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))
love your thoughts on this sir! thanks so very much for reading and reviewing .. peace on earth :)
E.
ps. still getting such a kick from your avatar ...

[wordman]

something we all find ourselves in one way or another but she has a grasp on it of knowing the truth

[Einstein Noodle]

yes She does Wordman .. death is a depth of wisdom no doubt. ... personally speaking .. i think all will be surprised when the time comes .. hopefully .. a nice surprise eh!?
thanks always for your visits :)
E.

[wordman]

youu`re welcome e

[h d e rushin]

When I did then will i belong to things. Demonstrations. Scenes. Events. But alive I am only in training for the young funeral director to get in his OJT by stitching my cold lips closed or applying makeup to where my hair line is no longer human. /But if I live and there is a tree near, I promise to hug it. to dig my toe-nails deep into it's bark and twist open a sore to let the gasses out. As for that combination of greed and animus,
ain't no cure for that. dana

[Einstein Noodle]

hey Dana! you are a deep thinker and its reflected in your review .. i am a fuddy duddy ... what is OJT? what a vivid picture of you and your toes digging in and twisting its core ... letting gasses escape .. my goodness girl! that would hurt!!! ;) i am a tree hugger too .. living among them the air is filtered fresh and pure as it can be, i guess .. i think you are right about greed and animus .. and they are their own just deserts .. the snake eating its own tail so to speak .. 'preciate you .. thanks for stopping and sharing your views :)
E.

[lightsong]

I see this in two terms, an ending of a relationship where she decided the end with no way back and You stand there helplessly with nothing You could do at all as she is stonger, the one with control, You see her tearing, and You see everything You two had shared of memories tearing and falling away. and I see also this as someone who is a very strong soul, she walked life's hard trails without uttering, carrying the weights with patience. and even at death, she is fearless while passing... welcoming it with accpetence and no need for anyone to be next to her as her colors and tastes fade away, You only watch, absorb... think ponder... and You surely made me ponder and think in this profound one dear E, specially with your opening "the lure was educational" this sentence speaks a lot in more than one way.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow LIght! you made it a movie! :)))))))))))))))) thanks so much for taking time and pondering along with me ... I appreciate your pointing out the loss and the fearlessness and acceptance that you see in this one ... and i really appreciate you pointing out that opening line ... i wasn't sure about it ... glad i kept it .. luv on ya .. peace and joy
E.

[lightsong]

would like to know more about your first sentence and what was on your mind.

"the lure was educational

She wasn't trying to open discussions"

is it that death was luring in an organized way for her? I can't but think of the new generation and how the media (music, movies, etc...) lure them into death and present suicide like a pleasant thing. or is it that there is luring in education and you wanted that but she wasn't open for it or for any explanations or discussions? lol if I am sounding too much, I didn't mean it that way :) always Luv Ya💕

[Einstein Noodle]

um ... try reading it that "She" is death itself ;) ... its a stretch i perhaps should have made more clear .. but the Reaper is always a guy it seems and I was playing with it as She ;) that's all .. thank you for asking .. a couple other comments reflected the same questioning ... i take it to heart and maybe will re-write this one later ... its too easy to get carried away when writing abstractly is my niche ... thank you for engaging me Light! I appreciate it.

[lightsong]

DON'T CHANGE A THING!!! now it reads differently, "She" is the death, the Reaper, why NOT? such a creative idea Mr. E! it definitely reads differently now. Thank You for the clarification 💞

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .............................

[emmajoy]

How deeply and sincerely do you need love someone to use that music, those lyrics, those strings.. to express everything? Only you know, sir. Your words are .. magnificent.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh Em! your words touch me heart for sure .. thank you so much! and how happy i am you took a listen to the music .. some mighty fine things came out of and were/are the Blues .. love and hugs my friend!
E.

[emmajoy]

Love the blues, probably my favourite genre. Your writing, that music.. really got to me.

Maybe listen to the lyrics and singer of my latest.
Basolutely no need to review.

[Einstein Noodle]

ok! going there Em! :).....

[Einstein Noodle]

Em! I didn't see one new I hadn't read ... no music vid either .. which one are you referring too??

[emmajoy]

The one on my Profile page.. the singers has such a wonderful range and the lyrics are.. quite beautiful.. or so I think! Smiles and prayers flying.

[emmajoy]

singeR, sorry typo, rushing .. removing food from oven!

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhhhhhh checking it out again! ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

Death. Each of us will know a different place. Hello my friend. I sat with five people dying and each time. Death was kind to them. Took them away slowly and painless. I liked the honest thoughts in the words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

what an honor to be there for those 5 sir ... i think one's heart and soul at peace passing over is a gift given those who have done some ground work in life ... of course there is always morphine that helps as well ;} working as a RN in Intensive Care i too am no stranger to "being there" ... God bless John! peace and joy to you and yours
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes, they had the morphine. They left with us with quiet conversation and peaceful death. I hope you are doing well and staying safe. Here my Michigan. The children don't care. 18-25 years old. Michigan is struggling with the virus.

[Einstein Noodle]

i live in N. Central AR which is pretty rural . i prefer staying home anyway so have not changed my life much at all. the County I live in was at 4 active cases for several weeks then a week ago dropped to 3. We are at 0 cases now and have had a total of 19 deaths .. i am grateful and fortunate to be sure .. i am retired and have not suffered loss of income such as it is ... keep staying safe there in Michigan sir! I think its more about social distancing and good hand washing than anything else.

[barleygirl]

We all hope that death can be so gentle & innocuous like a kitty creeping up on us. If death were universally so, maybe many would not fear & dread it as people often do. I believe that meeting one's end with the kind of calm your poem delivers must be a function of feeling fulfilled with the course of one's life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margei

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Margie .. so very fine to have your visits .. i think we need to "be ready" .. one truly can be snatched away in a flash .. preparation of the mind, body and soul a must says i ... "...tho I walk through the Valley of the shadow of Death, I shall fear no evil" ... peace and assurance like that does not come easy, in my opinion .. we have so many of our demons to face and resolve to get there .. to give forgiveness .. to accept being forgiven (sometimes harder than the other) your a classical gas dear one ;) and I don't mean the farting purse type :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a gentle goodbye. The memories remain in the feathered flavors. The placement of your words is powerful and effective in this one, E. The love and respect and perhaps even a bit of regret you felt for one now gone is so strong in every line . Excellent. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

Yep .. i do miss Norma and see her in a great part of each day .. even the times when she was in the cabin doing her thing and I out in the shop .. she was as much present as if we were having dinner together ... i gave the Reaper a female identity in this .. i am glad you picked up on the gentle parts of dying ... it is a subject that needs more open discussion I think ... we are too uncomfortable with it as subject of conversation ... its like "Oh! Hi! Nice to meet you! What do you think about dying?" :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) luv ya Lydi .. thank you so much for reading and reviewing always and its gratifying to hear you find the "form" effective .. peace sister!
E.

[Ken Simm.]

This is so careful and gentle and so much there in that moment. where we all wish we wern't and only one of us has the grace to handle it. This is quite frankly stunning my friend in its honesty, in its beauty and in its simple fear from one who is left without.
It is more that stunning it is a jewel in so much dross.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my Ken! your review has humbled me truly .. thank you so much .. from an artist such as you i am very encouraged sir .. so happy this one has touched you so .. stay safe brother! be well always!
E.

[MsJewel]

Death....not something I think about often, but your words are thought provoking and very well placed in their colors and feathered flavors (love that line). It is always a joy to read your work. Julie

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Ms. Jewel! I already told you how happy I feel at your return to the Cafe' .. but once again I say, I hope you make it a long stay .. love and peace .. and thank you for taking time ..