Exhale

Exhale

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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an old poem ..Exhale is used many times over the years for many titles of all kinds of things .. i think it retains its allure and power, however ... just my opinion

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Exhale


My craving wailed;     

(banshee on the wind)

     gripping 
             petals,

     misting
             reason.


Whispers trace kisses,
                         fragmenting my thoughts.


Untamed--
          love lured me

     crimson,
          and purple.

                                        exhale.....................
                                                              ........................
                                                                              ................................................................................



E.
© 2013 Einstein Noodle

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
I read Seriana's poem "Exhale" https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/drushin703/2767099/#comment-4469383
and thought it would be fun to re-post mine .. they are so different in theme .. hope you like it .. let me know what you think Seriana! :)

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"Whispers trace kisses,
fragmenting my thoughts.
Untamed--
love lured me"...

And then..Wait for it....aaah, "exhale..................
Just so breathtaking (literally!) and sensual E. My heart added extra beats while reading. This is love as it should always be - teetering, suspended in the passion and heat of the moment before...just like your supremely expessive lines and perfect pauses...
Loved this hugely and thank you for pointing me to Seriana's poem as well my friend!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

you have made my day Annette! gave me a good feeling inside with your review .. yes .. we can get kn.. read more



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I love this . . . simple & flowing just like breath. I have to confess, when I was reading this, I had a hard time picturing YOU as writing it . . . often your writing seems so far from the person I get to know as a person (you!) . . . it's like this poet must be on a different planet, in all the best ways! Nice to read your background ideas about posting this & how it all connected for you. Here's hoping life is buoyant for you & yours. I do agree that some words can be used often by poets & still retain their spunk, while others wilt & grow cliche (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

Well ......... i truly am honored you would pay such attention to the poetry i post ..we humans are .. read more
barleygirl

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reminding about St Paddy's coming up . . . I'm still trying to remind myself to change.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

take the leap Barley Girl ... our sunshine lasts longer that way :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
I caught your breath, felt your heart thumping and then exhale....... Untamed love certainly exercises the heart Mr E, as well as all the other parts. Crimson and purple, hot love colours, no pastel shades here. I caught your craving as well as your breath. Very sensual,. Banshee on the wind is genius. Liked your posted image too. Those fingers, reaching out to grasp under the light of the silvery moon :) Layout adds to the excitement. Good morning to you from across the wind swept waters.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

3 Years Ago

Always a pleasure when I take a walk on the forum to find you :) Have a great day :))
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

thank you ... and back at ya! :)
Chris Shaw

3 Years Ago

:).................
this is being tackled by the love bug...the kisses fragmenting the thoughts...

been there, done that....couldn't get enough...was like Friar Lawrence had the right idea...

"love moderately, long love doth so"---I never could adhere to that when I was younger and more vulnerable. This brought me back....love the layout of it as well.
j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

thanks jacob .. always for your reviews .. yeah .. youth and love are a mix of many things thrown to.. read more


... you can beat an egg, around the bush and a rug .. but ya can't beat the good old uns ... they are the best ... and these words made this reader gasp a little .. no kidding ............. they took my breath away ..

:)


Posted 3 Years Ago


Neville

3 Years Ago


and back at ya Gene ... am busy preparing to move house soo am not likely to be around that .. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

i'll be there! and again on the 17th ... all day :))))))))))))))))))))))) Éire go Brách
Neville

3 Years Ago


... :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) : ...
(I've said this before but I want to emphasize it again) It's ALWAYS a pleasure reading you, Mr. Noodle!!! I really like how differently you format your poems....it's not just a straight line down, it's spacing and tabbing and "enter"ing which makes it all the more an interesting read! Such a short read...but so thought-provoking...Thank you for sharing your outstanding poetry!!! :)

Kindly, Nix ❤️️

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

and thank you Nix! thank you very much!
Nix is typing...

3 Years Ago

You're so very welcome!! :)
zthat was amazing. I would call iy mysteriously romantic.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

ahahahaha .. well Rock-n-Roller! at my age your comment has made my day today .. i am in your debt ... read more
Filled with desire and anticipation, your poem conjures images of two people drawn to one another. At least that is my interpretation. The ending makes it seem as though they finally did get together. Nice to re-post an oldie. Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

when i went looking for this and found it ..the date blew me away .. 2013 .. and i had been at the C.. read more
Good morning! And what a lovely treat! Oh my, they are SOOOOO different. But this is akin to a sigh, and exasperated wait almost. I can feel the tension. It is though he (or she) is being lured, drawn to some unseen force and they can't quite reach it, sighing (exhaling) in exasperation.
"Untamed--
love lured me"
That line caught me. Had to read it several times. Could be taken several ways, but in the end I decided the writer was untamed, and therefore, love lured him in, giving in at last (exhale). Ha! I supposed it's fun for each author to read all the interpretations! Thank you for sharing this! It is, indeed, so very interesting to see the differences!


Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

oh yes ... we need to hear what everyone sees and thinks about our "stuff" eh!? for sure!! i love wh.. read more

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